Hi. I did hang out with my co-workers. Honestly, I was a bit nerves. Because I meet them for a long time. But, after hanging out with them, I was comfortable and fun quickly. And then, they gave present for congratulation my resigning day and going to California as exchange student to me. I was so surprised and touched. So I will not forget it and repay in future. Anyway, today was so excited.
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수정한 문장 (자연스럽고 간결하게):
“Hi. I hung out with my coworkers today.
Honestly, I was a bit nervous because I hadn’t seen them in a long time.
But after spending some time together, I quickly felt comfortable and had a lot of fun.
They even gave me a gift to celebrate my resignation and going to California as an exchange student.
I was really surprised and touched.
I’ll never forget it, and I hope I can return the favor someday.
Anyway, today was such an exciting day!”
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주요 수정 포인트 설명:
• “I did hang out” “I hung out”
“do + 동사원형”은 강조할 때 쓰지만, 여기선 단순 과거가 자연스럽습니다.
• “a bit nerves” “a bit nervous”
‘nerves’는 명사이고, ‘nervous’는 형용사예요.
• “Because I meet them for a long time” “because I hadn’t seen them in a long time”
과거에 못 봤던 시간이 현재까지 이어졌기 때문에 과거완료 (hadn’t seen)를 씁니다.
• “gave present for congratulation my resigning day”
자연스럽게 바꾸면:
“gave me a gift to celebrate my resignation and going to California as an exchange student.”
• “I will not forget it and repay in future”
“I’ll never forget it, and I hope I can return the favor someday.”
(‘repay’는 빚이나 은혜에 더 무거운 의미로 쓰여서 여기선 ‘return the favor’가 더 적절해요.)