Is South Korea economically

prepared for unification?

Today’s Topic

Is South Korea economically prepared for unification?

1. 내가 쓴 글

I don't Think that South Korea is economically prepared for unification because of Covid 19 and political deviding, gloval economics' crises, etc. As I know, in order to do unification, we need much money. When I watch the T.V. about North Korea, I feel how poor they are! We, South Korea live much better comparing with North Korea. In order to unify both of South Korea and North Korea, much money required enough to make North Korea live well as South Korea. We still have many difficulties in our economics due to Covid 19 and gloval crises on Economy. Therefore, I think, it's not good to unify South Korea and North Korea nowadays. We have to wait until we, South Korea, prepare economically for unification enough. My father, who missed his home town North Korea, has passed away already. We, his children, don't know where his hometown exactly is. We don't miss his hometown because we have no memories of it. So many people, who came from North Korea because of war, have passed away because of getting old. The numbers of people who miss North Korea as their home town are reducing because they are dying.

2. 첨삭되어 온 글

I don't Think(BETTER: think) that South Korea is economically prepared for unification because of Covid 19(BETTER: COVID-19) and political deviding(BETTER: division), gloval economics'(BETTER: global economic) crises, etc. As I know, in order to do unification, we need much money(OR: unification would require a lot of money). When I watch the T.V. (programs) about North Korea, I feel(BETTER: see) how poor(BETTER: impoverished) they are! We, South Korea live much better comparing with North Korea(BETTER: In comparison, South Korea enjoys a much better standard of living). In order to unify both of(X) South Korea and North Korea, much money (is) required enough to make North Korea live (as) well as South Korea. We still have many difficulties in our economics(BETTER: economic difficulties) due to Covid 19(BETTER: COVID-19) and gloval crises on Economy(BETTER: global economic crises). Therefore, I think,(X) it's not good(BETTER: advisable) to unify South Korea and North Korea nowadays. We have to wait until we,(X) South Korea,(X) prepare economically(BETTER: is economically prepared) for unification enough(X). My father, who missed his home town(BETTER: hometown in) North Korea, has passed away already. We, his children, don't know where his hometown exactly is. We don't miss his hometown because we have no memories of it. So many people, who came from North Korea because of war, have passed away because of getting old(BETTER: old age). The numbers(BETTER: number) of people who miss North Korea as their home town are(BETTER: hometown is) reducing because they are dying.

3. 내가 기억해야 할 것들

I don't Think(BETTER: think) that South Korea is economically prepared for unification because of Covid 19(BETTER: COVID-19) and political deviding(BETTER: division), gloval economics'(BETTER: global economic) crises, etc. As I know, in order to do unification, we need much money(OR: unification would require a lot of money).

1. 실수. 문장 중간에 왜 대문자를 썼을까. 하하 I don't think that....

2. 코비드 COVID-19 요거 항상 대문자로 써야 한다. COronaVIrus Disease-2019의 약어니까.

3. dividing 이 아니라 division을 써야 한다. political division

4. 세계 경제 위기로 gloval economics'crises라고 썼는데 global economic crises라고 쓰면 된다. global 은 v가 아니라 b고, 굳이 오포스트로피가 필요 없다. global economic crises

5. 통일을 위해선 많은 돈이 필요하다를 위해 in or der to do unification.... 구구절절이 길게 썼는데 아예 unification을 주어로 쓰면 요렇게 간단히 되는구나. 외우자.... unification would require a lot of money.

When I watch the T.V. (programs) about North Korea, I feel(BETTER: see) how poor(BETTER: impoverished) they are! We, South Korea live much better comparing with North Korea(BETTER: In comparison, South Korea enjoys a much better standard of living).

6. 그냥 T.V. 를 본다 해선 안되고 T.V. programs를 써줘야 하는구나. 그렇지 about을 썼으니까 무엇에 관한 프로그램을 봤을 때가 되니까. When I watch the T.V. programs about North Korea,

7. 느낀다 말고 그냥 본다로. I see how...

8. 가난하다 하면 poor만 썼는데 impoverished를 가난한 국가에는 쓰는 게 좋겠다.

impoverished 가난해진, 빈곤한.

9. 좋다는 표현을 무조건 외우자. In comparison, South Korea enjoys a much better standard of living.

In order to unify both of(X) South Korea and North Korea, much money (is) required enough to make North Korea live (as) well as South Korea.

10. both 다음에 of가 필요 없구나...... both South Korea and North Korea라고 할 것.

12. 수동태니까 비동사 들어가야지.... much money is required enough to make....

13. A만큼 잘 살게 이라고 할 때 as well as.. 즉 as well as South Korea 아하.

We still have many difficulties in our economics(BETTER: economic difficulties) due to Covid 19(BETTER: COVID-19) and gloval crises on Economy(BETTER: global economic crises).

14. 복잡하게 difficulties in our economics라고 쓰지 말고 간략하게 economic difficulties! 요런 식으로 쓰는 걸 연습하자. 얼마나 간단해. economic difficulties! 오케이.

15. 외우자. 코비드-나인틴 요거 몽땅 대문자다. COVID-19

16. 글로벌 v가 아니라 b야 b! 하하 global global

17. 위기와 경제를 따로 쓰지 말고 붙여서 economic crises!! 그러니까 global economic crises!

Therefore, I think, (X) it's not good(BETTER: advisable) to unify South Korea and North Korea nowadays. We have to wait until we, (X) South Korea, (X) prepare economically(BETTER: is economically prepared) for unification enough(X).

18. 쓸데없이 '나는 생각한다' 그런 거 집어넣지 말자. 하하 Therefore, it's not.....

19. 좋다는 무조건 good을 썼는데 익숙지 않지만 advisable을 쓰도록 하자.

advisable 바람직한, 권할만한.

20. 굳이 남한 쓰고 거기 다시 우리를 쓸 필요는 없구나. 불필요한 말 줄이기.

We have to wait until South Korea is economically prepared for unification.

21. 수동형을 써야지.

... South Korea is economically prepared...

22. 준비된다면 충분하다. 굳이 enough까지 또 넣지 않아도 된다. 불필요한 말 없애기.

We have to wait until South Korea is economically prepared for unification.

My father, who missed his home town(BETTER: hometown in) North Korea, has passed away already.

23. 홈타운은 붙여 쓰고 그리고 어디에 있다니까 in을 꼭 써줄 것.

My father, who missed his hometown in North Korea, has passed away already.

We don't miss his hometown because we have no memories of it. So many people, who came from North Korea because of war, have passed away because of getting old(BETTER: old age).

24. 나이가 들어서...라고 쓰기 위해 getting old를 썼는데 그냥 old age라고 쓰는 게 좋구나.

So many people, who came from North Korea because of war, have passed away because of old age.

The numbers(BETTER: number) of people who miss North Korea as their home town are(BETTER: hometown is) reducing because they are dying.

25. 사람들 숫자 할 때 단수! the number of people who miss....

26. 홈타운 붙여 쓸 것. hometown

27. 줄고 있다면 Be동사를 써줬어야지. 실수! The number of people who miss North Korea as their hometown is reducing because they are dying.

4. 그리고 딸려온 특별 멘트

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넵! 빨강 지적이 많다고 절대 실망하지 않겠습니다! 하하 감사합니다~ 계속 열심히 노력하겠습니다.

Tip:

1. COVID-19

- Name of the disease caused by the novel coronavirus

COVID-19 is short for COronaVIrus Disease-2019.

28. 코비드 19는 반드시 몽땅 대문자여야 한다. 코로나바이러스 질병 2019의 준말이니까. COVID-19

2. Pronoun-antecedent agreement

Please observe proper relative pronoun-antecedent agreement. The pronoun must agree with its antecedent in number, gender, and person.

Example: The memories we shared cannot be replaced. They are precious to me.

The antecedent is "memories." The pronoun is "they."

29. 선행사가 복수이면 대명사도 반드시 복수가 되어야 한다.

The memories we shared cannot be replaced. They are precious to me.

antecedent 선행사

pronoun 대명사

Pronoun Point of View

1st Person - I, my, me, mine, we, us, our, ours

2nd Person - You, yours

3rd Person - He, she, it, they, him, her, them, his, her, hers, its, their, theirs

3. Capitalize the first word of a sentence.

she wants to have a new computer. [incorrect]

To earn money, First, I am looking for a job these days. [incorrect]

("first" is not the first word in the sentence. Do not capitalize it.)

She wants to have a new computer.

[correct]

30. 첫 글자는 반드시 대문자! 익히 알고 있는 사실을 실수로 틀렸더니 구구절절이. 하하

4. The Number vs. A Number

The expression the number is followed by a singular verb while the expression a number is followed by a plural verb.

Examples:

The number of people we need to hire is thirteen.

A number of people have written in about this subject.

31. 오호. 이건 정말 몰랐던 건데. 꼭 기억해야겠다. 그러니까 The Number는 뒤에 단수 동사가 오고 A Number는 복수 동사가 온다. a number 뒤에 단수 동사가 올 것 같은데 아니구나. the number 뒤에 단수동사. a number 뒤에는 복수동사. 이 예문을 잘 외워두자. The number of people we need to hire is thirteen. A number of people have written in about this subject.

5. 첨삭받은 대로 고쳐 쓴 글

I don't think that South Korea is economically prepared for unification because of COVID-19 and political division, global economic crises, etc. As I know, unification would require a lot of money. When I watch the T.V. programs about North Korea, I see how impoverished they are! In comparison, South Korea enjoys a much better standard of living. In order to unify both South Korea and North Korea, much money is required enough to make North Korea live as well as South Korea. We still have many economic difficulties due to COVID-19 and global economic crises. Therefore, it's not advisable to unify South Korea and North Korea nowadays. We have to wait until South Korea is economically prepared for unification. My father, who missed his hometown in North Korea, has passed away already. We, his children, don't know where his hometown exactly is. We don't miss his hometown because we have no memories of it. So many people, who came from North Korea because of war, have passed away because of old age. The number of people who miss North Korea as their hometown is reducing because they are dying.

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