What musical instrument(s)

can you play?

Today’s Topic

What musical instrument(s) can you play? Do you still play the instrument(s)?

1. 내가 쓴 글

I play the saxophone. Yes, I still play the instrument. The reason why I had chosen the saxophone among the many musical instruments was that it looked easy to learn. I felt that even after one year's learning I could play it and enjoy it. I didn't think it's possible to enjoy or play such instruments as piano, cello, clarinet only for a few years of learning. It seemed to be required for many years of practicing from childhood. But saxophone is used for the eldest who are usually retired and old. For those people, the saxophone is known to be good for playing and enjoying and learning. How great it is to be the player in front of many people. My husband and I started to learn that saxophone together. It's very interesting. We practiced many hours in the institution and we had JJajangmyun and played it again. It looked like when we had fallen in love in our youth days. We joined the Saxophone Orchestra, which plays the songs only with saxophones as we were the member of a real orchestra. We play any parts of real Orchestra such as clarinet, violin, cello, etc only with the saxophone.

2. 첨삭받은 글

I play the saxophone. Yes, I still play the instrument. The reason why I had chosen the saxophone among the many musical instruments was that it looked easy to learn.

I felt that even after one year's learning I could (still) play it and enjoy it. I didn't think it's (it was) possible to enjoy or play such(X) instruments (such) as (the) piano, cello, clarinet only for a few years of learning. It seemed to be required for (require) many years of practicing from childhood. But (the) saxophone is used (played) for the eldest (elderly) who are usually retired and old. (retired.) For those people, the saxophone is known to be good for playing and enjoying and learning. How great it is to be the player in front of many people.

My husband and I started to learn that saxophone together. It's very interesting. We practiced many hours in the institution(,) and we had JJajangmyun (jjajangmyun) and played it again. It looked like when we had fallen in love in our youth days. We joined the Saxophone Orchestra, which plays the(X) songs only with saxophones(,) as we were the member (members) of a real orchestra. We play any parts of (the) real Orchestra (orchestra,) such as (the) clarinet, violin, cello, etc (etc.,) only with the saxophone.

3. 내가 기억해야 할 것들

1) I felt that even after one year's learning I could (still) play it and enjoy it.

아하. 여전히 그 악기를 연주하고 즐긴다는 뜻으로 still을 넣는 게 더 좋겠구나.

2) I didn't think it's (it was) possible to enjoy or play such(X) instruments (such) as (the) piano, cello, clarinet only for a few years of learning.

it's는 it is의 줄임말이기 때문에 과거라면 it was라고 온전히 다 써주어야만 한다.

such as는 뒤에 함께 붙여 써주어야 하는구나. such instruments as the piano...

그래서는 안되고 instruments such as the piano... 요런 식으로 such as는 함께 붙여서 쓸 것.

3) It seemed to be required for (require) many years of practicing from childhood.

그러게 여기서 왜 수동태가 나왔을까. 그것은 어릴 때부터의 많은 연습이 필요할 것 같다 했으니 요구한다를 써야지 이걸 왜 수동태로 썼을까. 그냥 흘러나오는 대로 무심하게 썼던 것 같다. It seemed to require many years...

4) But (the) saxophone is used (played) for the eldest (elderly) who are usually retired and old. (retired.)

정관사든지 부정관사든지 붙여야만 한다.

악기니까 used 보다는 played 가 낫겠구나.

하하 그냥 나이가 많은 사람 해서 eldest를 썼는데 사전을 찾아보니 정확하게 나와있다. eldest는 가장 나이 많은 사람 elderly는 나이 드신 분들. 아하. 어르신들 이야기할 땐 elderly를 써야겠구나.

elderly: 나이 드신 분들

eldest: 가장 나이가 많은 사람

retired면 이미 나이가 많아서 굳이 old가 또 들어갈 필요가 없구나. 그치.

5) We practiced many hours in the institution(,) and we had JJajangmyun (jjajangmyun) and played it again.

그치. and 앞에는 콤마!

짜장면 소리 나는 대로 했더니 맞았다. 다만 소문자로! 오케이.

6) We joined the Saxophone Orchestra, which plays the(X) songs only with saxophones(,) as we were the member (members) of a real orchestra.

노래들이니까 정관사가 붙어서 안되는구나.

as 앞엔 콤마.

오케스트라의 멤버들처럼... 정해진 오케스트라가 아니니까 정관사가 아니다.

7) We play any parts of (the) real Orchestra (orchestra,) such as (the) clarinet, violin, cello, etc (etc.,) only with the saxophone.

여기선 오케스트라 앞에 the를 붙이는구나.

함부로 대문자 쓰지 말 것. orchestra

악기 앞에 반드시 the를 붙여줘야지. 학창 시절 외웠던 기억.

etc에는 반드시 마침표를 찍어주고 다시 콤마를. 그치.

4. 그리고 딸려온 특별 멘트

Thank you for completing Step 4. We appreciate your effort in writing something down. You were able to make an interesting piece of writing. It is nice that you shared your experience in detail. We were entertained while reading it. It is also nice that you try to make your expressions sound as natural as possible. We can see that you try to widen your vocabulary and practice your English as much as you can. Good job! Keep practicing your English to enrich your vocabulary further. We would love to hear more of your stories and ideas. Good day! :)

호홋. 내 이야기가 재밌나 보다. 넵 감사합니다. 하하 이런 칭찬은 언제 들어도 신난다. 얏호.

5. 첨삭받은 대로 고쳐 쓴 글

I play the saxophone. Yes, I still play the instrument. The reason why I had chosen the saxophone among the many musical instruments was that it looked easy to learn.

I felt that even after one year's learning I could still play it and enjoy it. I didn't think it was possible to enjoy or play instruments such as the piano, cello, clarinet only for a few years of learning. It seemed to require many years of practicing from childhood. But the saxophone is played for the elderly who are usually retired. For those people, the saxophone is known to be good for playing and enjoying and learning. How great it is to be the player in front of many people.

My husband and I started to learn that saxophone together. It's very interesting. We practiced many hours in the institution, and we had jjajangmyun and played it again. It looked like when we had fallen in love in our youth days. We joined the Saxophone Orchestra, which plays songs only with saxophones, as we were members of a real orchestra. We play any parts of the real orchestra, such as the clarinet, violin, cello, etc., only with the saxophone.