How important is money to you?
Today’s Topic
How important is money to you?
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How important is money to me? I have never thought that money is important. If I have the basic things in life, then money is no more important. And I think I already have the necessities in life, such as house, car, food, family, etc. So I don't have to think money is important.
But I can imagine what I will do if I have much money. They are as follows. First, I will employ people to do all of my household chores, such as cleaning the house, cooking, etc. Whenever mealtime comes, there would already be very delicious meals for me. How wonderful it would be, ha ha!
Second, I will buy a golf course membership to enjoy playing golf more often. Third, I will buy new golf clubs. It's enough. I will go to the library every day and play golf for my health.
Now I'm reading Ecclesiastes of the Bible. It says that life is meaningless. Yes. I also think so. I really want to do only what I like. I don't want more money than what is needed to read, write, and play golf.
<내가 기억해야 할 것들>
How important is money to me? I had (have) never thought the (that) money is important. If I have the basic things for (in) life, then the(X) money is no more important. And I think I already have the basic things (OR: necessities) for (in) life(,) such as house, car, food, family, etc. So I don't have to think money is important.
현재 완료 진행형은 have라고 현재를 써줘야지. have never thought
생각하다에 that 절로 이끌어줘야 함. though that ~
in life라고 해야 하는구나.
언제나 어려운 관사. 여긴 the가 필요 없구나. money is no more important...
necessities가 더 낫겠구나. 기본적으로 필요한 것들.
But I can imagine what I will do if I have much money (money. They are) as follows. First, I will employee (employ) people to do all of my house cores (household chores,) such as cleaning (the) house, cooking, etc. Whenever meal time (mealtime) comes, there would already be very delicious meals for me. How wonderful it would be haha. (be, ha ha!)
They are로 문장을 따로 만들어줄 것.
하핫. 고용하다는 동사 emloy를 써야지요~
단어를 좀 찾아보고 쓸 것이지. 잡일은 chores다. household chores
집을 치우다엔 정관사 the가 들어가네. cleaning the house
mealtime 붙여 쓰는구나. 식사시간.
웃음을 쓸 때 앞에 콤마. be, ha ha!
Second, I will buy a golf course membership to enjoy playing golf more often. Third, I will change my (buy new) golf club from the old ones to the new ones. (clubs.) It's enough. I will go to the Library (library) every day and play golf for my health.
간단히 새 골프채를 사겠다 하면 되는걸 하하 buy new golf clubs
함부로 대문자 쓰지 마라. library
Now I'm reading Ecclesiasts (Ecclesiastes) of the Bible. It says that the(X) life is meaningless. Yes. I also think so. I really want to do only what I like. I don't want more money than I can do reading writing (what is needed to read, write,) and playing (play) golf.
아무리 외우려 해도 한 두자 꼭 틀리는 전도서! Ecclesiastes 확실히 외우 잣.
하, 여긴 또 정관사가 필요 없다네. 그치. 그냥 보편적 삶이니까. 관사 없이 그냥 life
what을 씀으로 매우 깔끔해지는구나. what is needed to read, write, and play golf.
<그리고 딸려온 특별 멘트>
Thank you for completing the writing activity. It is greatly appreciated. It is nice that you made an interesting piece of writing. We can see that you try to practice your English as much as you can. Good job!
NOTE:
SUCH AS punctuation
When to Use Such As Without a Comma
Don’t use a comma if such as is part of a restrictive group of words:
Dishes such as kimchi, bulgogi, and japchae are being sold in that restaurant.
아하. 제한적 부분을 말할 땐 such as에 콤마를 붙이지 마라.
Here we have a restrictive phrase. Try taking “such as kimchi, bulgogi, and japchae” out of the sentence:
Dishes are being sold in that restaurant.
The sentence isn’t true anymore. We’re not trying to say that all dishes are being sold in the restaurant -- we’re restricting the statement to specific dishes: kimchi, bulgogi, and japchae.
그렇지. 모든 요리를 파는 건 아니지. 오직 김치 불고기 잡채만을 파는 거지. 그럴 땐 제한을 두는 거니까 such as에 콤마를 붙이지 않는다.
When to Use a Comma Before Such As
Use a comma if such as is part of a nonrestrictive group of words:
In this restaurant, you’ll see many kinds of Korean food, such as bulgogi, kimchi, and galbitang.
The phrase such as bulgogi, kimchi, and galbitang is nonrestrictive, so you need a comma. How can you tell it’s nonrestrictive? Take the phrase out and see whether the sentence is still true:
제한적이 아니면 such as 앞에 콤마를 쓴다. 그렇다면 어떻게 제한적인지 제한적 아닌지를 알까? 아하 그 문장을 빼내고도 문장이 여전히 사실이면 제한적이 아니다.
In this restaurant, you’ll see many kinds of Korean food.
The sentence is still true; therefore, the phrase is nonrestrictive.
이 식당에서는 한국음식을 판다. 불고기 잡채 등 such as 부분을 빼도 여전히 사실을 말하고 있다. 그러므로 이럴 땐 제한적이 아닌 문장이며 이땐 콤마를 붙여줘야 한다. 오케이.
(사진: 친구 H)