In what instance did you make

a wrong decision?

Today’s Topic

In what instance did you make a wrong decision? If there are any big decisions you regret, state the experience briefly.

<내가 쓴 글>

My son, a very smart, handsome, urban kid, had a hard time at his new school. I shouldn't have transferred him to that country school. However, when I was young, I was determined to send my child to a school near my house. Even though it was very far from my house, my mother sent me to that school because it was very famous. I had so many difficulties to go to that far away school. So, I had decided that I will never send my children to the school far a way. So when I moved, I transferred my child to a school near my house. However, the school was in a very rural area that had not yet been developed. My child flirted too much at that country school. The rural children were so cruel to my son. We, who were living in my husband's company house, had to move to a new company house according to the company's law. I think we should have not transferred him from the city school to that rural school because of only the reason located near my house. It was a very bad decision. I regretted it forever.

<첨삭되어 온 글>

My son, a very smart, handsome, urban kid, had a hard time at his new school. I shouldn't have transferred him to that country school. However, when I was young, I was determined to send my child to a school near my house. Even though it was very far from my house, my mother sent me to that school(BETTER: the school I went to was very far from my house, my mother sent me there) because it was very famous. I had so many difficulties to go to that far away(faraway) school. So, I had(So I) decided that I will(would) never send my children to the(a) school far a way.(that is far away.) So when I moved, I transferred my child to a school near my house. However, the school was in a very rural area that had not yet been developed. My child flirted too much at that country school. The rural children were so cruel to my son. We, who were living in my husband's company house, had to move to a new company house according to the company's law. I think we should have not transferred him from the city school to that rural school because of(for) only the reason (that it was) located near my house. It was a very bad decision. I regretted it forever.

<내가 기억해야될 것들>

My son, a very smart, handsome, urban kid, had a hard time at his new school. I shouldn't have transferred him to that country school. However, when I was young, I was determined to send my child to a school near my house. Even though it was very far from my house, my mother sent me to that school(BETTER: the school I went to was very far from my house, my mother sent me there) because it was very famous.

1. 아하. 요렇게 세련되게 표현할 수 있구나. 집에서 매우 멀었음에도 불구하고 나의 엄마는 그 학교에 보냈다를 있는 그대로 썼는데 그게 아니라 Even though the school I went to was very far from my house, my mother sent me there because it was very famous.

I had so many difficulties to go to that far away(faraway) school. So, I had(So I) decided that I will(would) never send my children to the(a) school far a way.(that is far away.)

2. 먼 학교라 할 때는 far away를 붙여써야하는구나. 오케이. faraway school

3. 오홋. 굳이 완료형이 필요없구나. So I decided that I would never send my children to a school that is far away.

4. 시제일치! So I decided that I would never send... decided 과거를 썼으면 당연히 종속절에 will 이 아니라 would 과거를 써야지!!!

5. 멀리 있는 학교면 정관사 the 가 아니라 a 여야 한다. ..... I would never send my children to a school that is far away.

6. 멀리 있는 학교를 그냥 a school far away 라고 쓸 것이 아니라 that을 써서 따로 써주어야하는구나. So I decided that I would never send my children to a school that is far away.

So when I moved, I transferred my child to a school near my house. However, the school was in a very rural area that had not yet been developed. My child flirted too much at that country school. The rural children were so cruel to my son. We, who were living in my husband's company house, had to move to a new company house according to the company's law. I think we should have not transferred him from the city school to that rural school because of(for) only the reason (that it was) located near my house. It was a very bad decision. I regretted it forever.

7. ..한 이유때문에 할 때 굳이 because of를 쓸 필요는 없고 for 를 쓰면 더 좋구나. ...we should have not transferred him from the city school to that rural school for only the reason...

8. 함부로 that을 생략하지말고 친절하게 that it was...를 써주도록 하자. ...we should have not transferred him from the city school to that rural school for only the reason that it was located near my house.

<첨삭 받은 대로 고쳐쓴 글>

My son, a very smart, handsome, urban kid, had a hard time at his new school. I shouldn't have transferred him to that country school. However, when I was young, I was determined to send my child to a school near my house. Even though the school I went to was very far from my house, my mother sent me there because it was very famous. I had so many difficulties to go to that faraway school. So I decided that I would never send my children to a school that is far away. So when I moved, I transferred my child to a school near my house. However, the school was in a very rural area that had not yet been developed. My child flirted too much at that country school. The rural children were so cruel to my son. We, who were living in my husband's company house, had to move to a new company house according to the company's law. I think we should have not transferred him from the city school to that rural school for only the reason that it was located near my house. It was a very bad decision. I regretted it forever.

<그리고 딸려 온 특별 멘트>

We are thankful that you did your best to complete Step 4. We appreciate your determination to write a nice entry here. You tried to express some of your ideas in English successfully, and that was a good job! Just study the corrections well. Also, please take note of the following useful suggestions:

오홋. 감사합니다. 넵. 열심히 고쳐주신 것 익히겠습니다.

1. A comma is not needed after coordinating conjunctions (such as and, but, so) when they start a sentence. But a comma is needed before them when they are between two clauses. However, when the two clauses are too short, the comma can be omitted.

문장을 시작할 때 쓰인 대등접속사 뒤에는 콤마가 필요없다. and, but, so... 요런 것들. 그러나 두 문장 사이에 쓰였다면 그 앞에 반드시 콤마를 써야한다. 그렇지만 그 두 문장이 너무 짧으면 콤마는 생략될 수 있다. 아하.

coordinating conjunctions 등위 접속사. 대등 접속사.

EXAMPLES:

Those people are wonderful and optimistic. So hanging out with them helps me a lot.

아하. 이렇게 등위접속사인 So 가 문장을 시작할 때 쓰이면 콤마가 필요없구나.

They are really nice people, so I hang out with them.

두 문장 사이에 있는 so 앞에는 반드시 콤마! 아하.

My friends are cheerful people. And they like attending joyful events.

등위접속사 And 가 문장을 시작할 때 쓰이니까 콤마가 없다!

They are cheerful, and they like hanging out.

등위접속사 and가 두 문장 사이에 있으니까 반드시 콤마 필요!

Those people are wonderful and optimistic. But I don't hang out with them a lot.

등위접속사 But 이 문장을 새로 시작할 때 쓰이니까 콤마 필요 없다!

They are wonderful people, but they don't like going out.

등위접속사 but이 두 문장 사이에 있으니 콤마 꼭 쓸것! 오케이!

I like you and you like me.

등위접속사 and가 두 문장 사이에 있지만 문장이 너무 짧으니까 콤마 생략 가능! 아하.

2. Be more aware of the correct parts of speech.

faraway (adjective)
far away (adverbial phrase)

faraway 는 형용사.

far away 는 부사구. 아하.

EXAMPLES:
There is a woman with a faraway look in her eyes.
We shall ride far away.

멀리 보는 눈을 가진 여자... 아하

멀리 타고 갈 거야.

We hope the suggestions above are helpful to you. Keep on expressing yourself in English. They say that constant correct practice makes perfect, so we believe you can do it much better next time! We'll be here to help you improve your English writing skill every step of the way, so keep writing. :)

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