Today is my resignation day.
I can’t believe it’s really here.
I just hope I can be happy today.
I still remember how, two and a half years ago, I couldn’t even have lunch properly.
Looking back, I think I’ve grown a lot since then.
Now, it’s a new beginning.
Let’s go!
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I don’t know it is coming to me.
• 문법적으로 어색
• I can’t believe it’s really here.
“이 날이 진짜 온 게 믿기지 않아”라는 뜻, 자연스럽고 감정도 담김
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I hope to be happy today.
• 의미는 맞지만 더 자연스럽게:
I just hope I can be happy today.
“오늘만큼은 행복했으면 좋겠어” 라는 느낌
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Two and a half years ago, I remember that I can’t have a lunch easily.
• 더 자연스럽게 바꾸면:
I still remember how, two and a half years ago, I couldn’t even have lunch properly.
“2년 반 전, 밥도 제대로 못 먹었던 때가 기억나”
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I think I grown up more than past.
• “grown up”은 완료형으로 써야 함
• I think I’ve grown a lot since then.
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Now, It’s new start.
• “It’s new start” 관사(a)가 필요
• It’s a new beginning.
더 감성적이고 자연스러운 표현