What is your favorite sport?

Tell me why.

Today’s Topic

What is your favorite sport? Tell me why.

1. 내가 쓴 글

Golf is my favorite sport. Why? It is because it requires my concentrating during the game. When I play golf with my favorite members, I feel so good with the good mind of our team. I enjoy the scenery of the country club. It usually has very good scenery. My husband always says that I have to try to shot a ball better than watching only the good scenery. I agree. But I prefer watching good scenery more. How wonderful it is to play golf in such good scenery. I also enjoy the talkative with our team who usually my friends. When I try to put a ball into a hole, I have to concentrate so much that I couldn't feel anybody on the ground. I feel that there are only I and a ball and a hole. It is very fantastic to concentrate as I am only at that place. I couldn't hear any sound of members because I only think about falling my ball into the hole exactly. Finally, if I heard the sound of my ball entering exactly into the hole, how wonderful I would be. It's the reason why I enjoy playing golf.

2. 첨삭되어 온 글

Golf is my favorite sport. Why? It is because it requires my concentrating during the game. When I play golf with my favorite members, I feel so good with the good mind of our team. I enjoy the scenery of the country club. It usually has very good scenery. My husband always says that I have to try to shot (shoot) a ball better than watching only the good scenery. I agree. But I prefer watching (the) good scenery more. How wonderful it is to play golf in such good scenery. I also enjoy the talkative (atmosphere) with our team who (are) usually my friends. When I try to put a ball into a hole, I have to concentrate so much that I couldn't feel anybody on the ground. I feel that there are (is) only I (me) and a ball and a hole. It is very fantastic to concentrate as I am only at that place. I couldn't hear any sound of members because I only think about falling my ball into the hole exactly. Finally, if I heard the sound of my ball entering exactly into the hole, how wonderful I would be. It's the reason why I enjoy playing golf.

3. 내가 기억할 것

1) My husband always says that I have to try to shot (shoot) a ball better than watching only the good scenery.

하하 그치 동사 원형을 써야지.

shot 명사 발사 shot의 과거, 과거분사.

shoot 발사하다 shoot shot shot

2) But I prefer watching (the) good scenery more.

the good scenery 구나.

관사를 항상 신경 쓰자.

3) I also enjoy the talkative (atmosphere) with our team who (are) usually my friends.

그치. 그냥 talkative 만 써놓을 순 없지. 형용사인 채로 영 이상하더니 여기 atmosphere를 넣으면 되는구나. 그치그치.

who usually my friends 도 말이 안 되지. 동사가 있어야 할 것 아닌가.

who are usually my friends 가 되어야지. 항상 문장에 구성요소가 다 들어가 있는지 신경 쓰도록 하자.

4) I feel that there are (is) only I (me) and a ball and a hole.

요게 참 이상하다. 나와 공과 홀. 그렇게 세 개니까 are를 썼는데 is를 쓰라 한다. and가 있으니까 일단 끊어지는 걸로 보는가 보다.

There is only I. 가 아니라 there is only me! 구나. 이런 경우 I일까 me일까 항상 궁금했는데 확실하게 me를 쓰는 거구나. 그런데 참 이상하다. 왜 목적어가 아닌데 me를 쓸까. 그래도 me라니까 그냥 외우자. There is only me!

4. 그리고 딸려온 특별 멘트

Note:

There Is vs. There Are With a Series of Items
1. When the first noun in the series is singular or noncount, use there is.

There is a book and a pen in my bag.
There is a pillow, sheets, and two blankets on my bed.

아하. 명확한 설명.

그러니까 뒤에 무엇이 나오건 첫 번째 단어가 단수 이거나 셀 수 없는 명사일 때는 is를 쓰는구나. 아하.

2. When the first noun in the series is plural, use there are.

There are flowers and herbs in my mom’s garden.
There are cookies and a sandwich in my lunch bag.

오호... 뒤로 이어지는 단어의 처음이 복수일 때는 그 뒤에 단수가 오더라도 are를 쓰고. 아하.

Thank you for completing this task! There is a good flow of ideas in your sentences. You only committed few errors, which made your essay easy to read and follow through. Please check the corrections we have provided so you can apply the appropriate expressions in your future essays. Good luck and keep writing! :)

하하 그리고 내가 좋아하는 칭찬. 푸하하하 넵 감사합니다. 계속 열심히 쓰겠습니다~

5. 첨삭받은 대로 쓴 글

Golf is my favorite sport. Why? It is because it requires my concentrating during the game. When I play golf with my favorite members, I feel so good with the good mind of our team. I enjoy the scenery of the country club. It usually has very good scenery. My husband always says that I have to try to shoot a ball better than watching only the good scenery. I agree. But I prefer watching the good scenery more. How wonderful it is to play golf in such good scenery. I also enjoy the talkative atmosphere with our team who are usually my friends. When I try to put a ball into a hole, I have to concentrate so much that I couldn't feel anybody on the ground. I feel that there is only me and a ball and a hole. It is very fantastic to concentrate as I am only at that place. I couldn't hear any sound of members because I only think about falling my ball into the hole exactly. Finally, if I heard the sound of my ball entering exactly into the hole, how wonderful I would be. It's the reason why I enjoy playing golf.

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