The rain fell softly.
Today’s Topic
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1. 내가 쓴 글
The rain fell softly. I was waiting for the bus to go home in the street. Suddenly he appeared far away. I saw him in a circle. He was the chairman of the circle. I was a newcomer. He greeted me so much. He grabbed me next to him, who hesitated about where to sit when they made a round seat for discussion. He and I agreed when we had a heated discussion of mixed pros and cons. It made me feel like he was completely my style. But now I found him in the street with another girl. I took a peek at them, trying not to be noticed by them. They passed me far away. Did he find me? No. He won't even remember me. He's the chairman, so I remember him, but I'm just an ordinary member. Anyway, it made me very sad that he was with a lady. Haha but it's funny. He doesn't even think of me, but I like him alone and I'm sad that he's with a girl. Nonsense. Yes, I don't even have time to date men these days. I will continue my way.
2. 첨삭되어 온 글
The rain fell softly. I was waiting for the bus to go home in the street. Suddenly(,) he appeared far away. I saw him in a circle. He was the chairman of the circle. I was a newcomer. He greeted me so much. He grabbed me next to him, who hesitated about where to sit when they made a round seat for discussion. He and I agreed when we had a heated discussion of mixed pros and cons. It made me feel like he was completely my style. But now(,) I found him in the street with another girl. I took a peek at them, trying not to be noticed by them. They passed (by) me far away. Did he find me? No. He won't even remember me. He's the chairman, so I remember him, but I'm just an ordinary member. Anyway, it made me very sad that he was with a lady. Haha(!) but(But) it's funny. He doesn't even think of me, but I like him alone(,) and I'm sad that he's with a girl. Nonsense. Yes, I don't even have time to date men these days. I will continue my way.
3. 내가 고쳐야할 것들
1) 콤마 쓰는 거 잊지 말자.
Suddenly(,) he appeared far away.
But now(,) I found him in the street with another girl. I took a peek at them, trying not to be noticed by them.
He doesn't even think of me, but I like him alone(,) and I'm sad that he's with a girl.
2) pass에 by를 붙여야하는구나.
They passed (by) me far away.
3)웃음소리 하하는 따로 떼어서 느낌표로 마무리.
Haha(!) but(But) it's funny.
4. 첨삭받은 대로 고쳐쓴 글
The rain fell softly. I was waiting for the bus to go home in the street. Suddenly, he appeared far away. I saw him in a circle. He was the chairman of the circle. I was a newcomer. He greeted me so much. He grabbed me next to him, who hesitated about where to sit when they made a round seat for discussion. He and I agreed when we had a heated discussion of mixed pros and cons. It made me feel like he was completely my style. But now, I found him in the street with another girl. I took a peek at them, trying not to be noticed by them. They passed by me far away. Did he find me? No. He won't even remember me. He's the chairman, so I remember him, but I'm just an ordinary member. Anyway, it made me very sad that he was with a lady. Haha! But it's funny. He doesn't even think of me, but I like him alone, and I'm sad that he's with a girl. Nonsense. Yes, I don't even have time to date men these days. I will continue my way.
5. 그리고 딸려온 특별 멘트
I am sorry to hear about that. The silver lining is you knew about the truth. The right person is just around the corner, and when he comes, your world will light up. I am sure that he won't fail to notice a wonderful person like you. Cheer up, beauty!
하하 나같은 괜찮은 사람이래. 오호호홋 신난다.
(사진:꽃뜰)