How many hours do you sleep
on average?
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Today’s Topic
How many hours do you sleep on average?
1. 내가 쓴 글
I sleep 6 or 7 hours on average. I usually go to bed at 10 p.m. and wake up 6 a.m.. Even though I go to bed at 10 p.m., I fall in sleep almost 11 or 12 p.m. It's the reason why I tell you I sleep 6 or 7 hours on average in the above at the first sentence. My husband sleeps almost 2 or 3 a.m. and wakes up 9 or 10 a.m. I am an early bird and my husband is a night owl. Those different sleep style makes us difficult to have good time in honeymoon. When I want to have a good time early in the morning, he is so sleepy and when he wants to have fun late in the evening, I am so sleepy. We are so opposite in every style in life. Some time we laugh saying each other If someone put us into the blind and mix then we would be born as a perfect person. We are so opposite in many side. I like hot water, he likes not hot water. He likes eating at home. I prefer eating at restaurant. He likes listening, I like talking. etc.
2. 첨삭되어 온 글
I sleep 6(six) or 7(seven) hours on average. I usually go to bed at 10 p.m. and wake up (at) 6 a.m..(X) Even though I go to bed at 10 p.m., I fall in(X) sleep(asleep at) almost 11 or 12 p.m. It's the reason why I tell you I sleep 6(six) or 7(seven) hours on average in the above at the first sentence(first sentence above).
My husband sleeps (at) almost 2 or 3 a.m. and wakes up (at) 9 or 10 a.m. I am an early bird(,) and my husband is a night owl. Those different sleep style makes(styles make) us difficult to have (a) good time in(on our) honeymoon. When I want to have a good time early in the morning, he is so sleepy(;) and when he wants to have fun late in the evening, I am so sleepy. We are so opposite in every style in life(OR: our lifestyle).
Some time(Sometimes) we laugh (while) saying (to) each other(,) If("If) someone (were to) put us into the blind and mix(,) then we would be born as a(X) perfect person(people).(") We are so opposite in many side(ways). I like hot water, (;) he likes not(does not like) hot water. He likes eating at home. I prefer eating at restaurant(restaurants). He likes listening, (;) I like talking.(,) etc(and so on).
3. 내가 기억해야 할 것들.
I sleep 6(six) or 7(seven) hours on average. I usually go to bed at 10 p.m. and wake up (at) 6 a.m..(X) Even though I go to bed at 10 p.m., I fall in(X) sleep(asleep at) almost 11 or 12 p.m. It's the reason why I tell you I sleep 6(six) or 7(seven) hours on average in the above at the first sentence(first sentence above).
6 or 7 hours라고 쓰면 안 되는구나. six or seven hours라고 써야 한다.
wake up at 6 a.m. 몇 시에 일어난다 할 때 전치사 at 쓰는 걸 잊지 말자.
a.m. 은 오전이라는 뜻이므로 그 뒤에 마침표를 하나 더 찍어주어야 할 것 같아서 결국 마침표가 두 개가 되었는데 그건 아닌가 보다. 그냥 a.m.으로 마침표까지 쓴 걸로 본다.
잠들다는 I fall asleep at 11 p.m.으로 써야 하는구나.
위에 있는 첫 문장 in the first sentence above
My husband sleeps (at) almost 2 or 3 a.m. and wakes up (at) 9 or 10 a.m. I am an early bird(,) and my husband is a night owl. Those different sleep style makes(styles make) us difficult to have (a) good time in(on our) honeymoon. When I want to have a good time early in the morning, he is so sleepy(;) and when he wants to have fun late in the evening, I am so sleepy. We are so opposite in every style in life(OR: our lifestyle).
시간 앞에는 at을 쓸 것. sleeps at almost 2 or 3 a.m.... wakes up at 9 or 10 a.m.
and 앞에 콤마. early bird, and my husband...
그렇지. 다른 스타일들이지. 그게 복수가 되어야지. those different sleep styles make us...
좋은 시간 앞에 a 붙일 것. a good time
신혼시절에 on이구나. on our honeymoon
and 앞에 세미콜론... so sleepy; and when he...
in our lifestyle.
Some time(Sometimes) we laugh (while) saying (to) each other(,) If("If) someone (were to) put us into the blind and mix(,) then we would be born as a(X) perfect person(people).(") We are so opposite in many side(ways). I like hot water, (;) he likes not(does not like) hot water. He likes eating at home. I prefer eating at restaurant(restaurants). He likes listening, (;) I like talking.(,) etc(and so on).
오홋 요거 붙여 쓰는구나. Sometimes
.. 하면서에 while을 쓰면 되는구나.
saying to each other
따옴표 앞에 콤마 써줄 것. each other, "If...
미래 가정법 were to
then 앞에 콤마.... mix, then we would...
여러 사람은 people
여러 면에서는 ways
쎄미 콜론 사용 I like hot water; he...
하하 그렇지 does not like 라 해야지...
식당들 복수로 써야 하는구나. restaurants
서로 대비될 때 쎄미 콜론 사용.. he...; I...
등등이 문장일 땐 and so on
4. 첨삭받은 대로 다시 고쳐 쓴 글
I sleep six or seven hours on average. I usually go to bed at 10 p.m. and wake up at 6 a.m. Even though I go to bed at 10 p.m., I fall asleep at almost 11 or 12 p.m. It's the reason why I tell you I sleep six or seven hours on average in the first sentence above.
My husband sleeps at almost 2 or 3 a.m. and wakes up at 9 or 10 a.m. I am an early bird, and my husband is a night owl. Those different sleep styles make us difficult to have a good time on our honeymoon. When I want to have a good time early in the morning, he is so sleepy; and when he wants to have fun late in the evening, I am so sleepy. We are so opposite in our lifestyle.
sometimes we laugh while saying to each other, "If someone were to put us into the blind and mix, then we would be born as perfect people." We are so opposite in many ways. I like hot water; he does not like hot water. He likes eating at home. I prefer eating at restaurants. He likes listening; I like talking, and so on.
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brush up.. 의 공부를 다시 하다.
punctuation 구두점
prepositions 전치사
articles 법률, 규약
article 글, 기사.
아하 복수일 땐 법률, 규약. 단수일 땐 글 , 기사. 아하.
게다가 관사라는 뜻도 있구나.
definite article 오호 정관사 the
indefinite article 요 거이 부정관사 a
문법 좀 더 공부하세요. 구두점, 관사, 전치사를 다시 공부하십시오. 그래야 문장 구성을 개선하고 더 많은 문장을 만들 수 있습니다. 좋은 문장은 훌륭한 연사가 꼭 갖춰야 할 것이라는 걸 기억하십시오. 계속 쓰세요! 안전을 유지하세요.
Tip:
Prepositions of Time : At, On, In
AT:
> times: at 8 pm, at midnight, at 6:30
> holiday periods: at Christmas, at Easter
> at night
> at lunchtime, at dinnertime, at breakfast time
시간 전치사: At, On, In
At:
시간: at 8 pm, at midnight, at 6:30
휴가기간: at Christmas, at Easter
밤에: at night
점심시간에 저녁시간에 아침시간에: at lunchtime, at dinnertime, at breakfast time
ON:
> days: on Monday, on my birthday, on Christmas Day, on weekdays/weekends
> days + morning / afternoon / evening / night: on Tuesday morning
> dates: on the 20th of June
ON:
날: on Monday, on my birthday, on Christmas Day, on weekdays/weekends
날 + 아침/ 오후 / 저녁/ 밤: days + morning/ afternoon / evening / night: on Tuesday morning
날짜: 6월 20일 on the 20th of June
IN:
> years: in 1992, in 2006
> months: in December, in June
> decades: in the sixties, in the 1790s
> centuries: in the 19th century
> seasons: in winter, in summer
> in the morning, in the afternoon, in the evening
IN:
연도: in 1992, in 2006
달: in December, in June
수십 년: in the sixties, in the 1790s 60년대, 1790년대
세기: in the 19th century
계절: in winter, in summer
아침 오후 저녁: in the morning, in the afternoon, in the evening
NO PREPOSITION:
> next week, year, month, etc.
> last night, year, etc.
> this morning, month, weekend, etc.
> every day, night, year, etc.
> today, tomorrow, yesterday
전치사 없음:
next week, year, month, etc. 다음 주 다음 해 다음 달
last night, year, etc. 지난밤 지난해
this morning, month, weekend, etc. 오늘 아침 이번 달 이번 주
every day, night, year, etc. 매일매일 밤 매해
today, tomorrow, yesterday 오늘내일 어제
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