Which is the better company,

Apple or Samsung?

Today’s Topic

Overall, which is the better company, Apple or Samsung? Why do you think so?

1. 내가 쓴 글.

Overall, Samsung is the better company. The reason why I think so is that I'm a Korean. In fact, I don't have much information about Apple. Therefore it's very difficult for me to say which one is better than another one among those Apple and Samsung. Without any exact reason, I always insist that Samsung is the best. It maybe my wish to insist Samsung is the best because I'm a Korean. I manage a blog and it makes me be fond of Samsung. Let me have an example as follows: first, when I post articles and pictures, I'm very comfortable with using Samsung such as a cellular phone and a wireless notebook. Second, the camera of Samsung cellular phone has great functions enough to post pictures very good in the blog. Third, it's very convenient to carry the notebook because it's so light. I can carry it in my bag without any difficulties owing to the weight. It's so light. For the more how good the shape is! I always admire it. When I use the camera for the pictures it's very inconvenient to carry it but when I use it a cellular phone, it's so convenient.

2. 첨삭되어 온 글.

Overall, Samsung is the better company. The reason why I think so is that I'm a Korean. In fact, I don't have much information about Apple. Therefore(,) it's very difficult for me to say which one is better than another one among those (BETTER: between) Apple and Samsung. Without any exact reason, I always insist that Samsung is the best. It may be my wish to insist Samsung is the best because I'm a Korean. I manage a blog(,) and it makes me be(X) fond of Samsung (the brand). Let me have an example as follows: first (BETTER: give examples. First), when I post articles and pictures, I'm very comfortable with(X) using Samsung such as a cellular phone and a wireless notebook (BETTER: my Samsung phone and laptop). Second, the camera of (a) Samsung cellular phone has great functions enough to post pictures(X) very good (pictures) in the blog. Third (BETTER: Lastly), it's very convenient to carry the notebook because it's so light. I can carry (BETTER: put) it in my bag without any difficulties owing to the weight. It's so light. For the more how good the shape is! (BETTER: Moreover, its shape is good.) I always admire it. When I use the (a) camera for the (taking) pictures(,) it's very inconvenient to carry it(,) but when I use it(X) a cellular phone, it's so convenient.

3. 내가 기억해야 할 것들.

Therefore(,) it's very difficult for me to say which one is better than another one among those (BETTER: between) Apple and Samsung.

1. therefore 다음에 반드시 콤마!

2. 오홋 요거 간단히 between이라고 하면 되는구나. 아하.

which one is better between Apple and Samsung.

I manage a blog(,) and it makes me be(X) fond of Samsung (the brand).

3. and 앞에 반드시 콤마!

4. be fond of가 절로 나왔는데 굳이 여기서 be를 써줄 필요는 없구나.

makes me fond of...

5. 삼성을 계속 써주지 말고 그 브랜드라고 받아야겠구나. 그렇지.

it makes me fond of the brand.

Let me have an example as follows: first (BETTER: give examples. First), when I post articles and pictures, I'm very comfortable with(X) using Samsung such as a cellular phone and a wireless notebook (BETTER: my Samsung phone and laptop).

6. have 가 아니라 give examples로 써야 하는구나.

7. 굳이 as follows를 쓰지 말고 일단 끊고 나서 First, 요렇게 시작하라고. 아하.

8. comfortable에 with 가 필요 없구나. 그냥 using을 써주면 되는구나. 사용하는 게 편하다.

I'm very comfortable using...

9. 쎌룰라폰이니 아이어리스 노트북이니 복잡하게 말고 하하 간단히 my Samsung phone and laptop.

Second, the camera of (a) Samsung cellular phone has great functions enough to post pictures(X) very good (pictures) in the blog.

10. 단수라면 반드시 관사 붙여줄 것.

the camera of a Samsung cellular phone...

11. 순서가 very good pictures가 되어야 하는구나.

enough to post very good pictures in the blog.

Third (BETTER: Lastly), it's very convenient to carry the notebook because it's so light. I can carry (BETTER: put) it in my bag without any difficulties owing to the weight.

12. 오호 마지막엔 Lastly라고 써주라고요~ 넵!!! Lastly,

13. 그렇지. 가방에 넣어 이동하는데 문제없다인데 가방에 넣는다니까 carry 가 아니라 put을 써야 하는구나. carry는 앞에 써주었으니까. 좋은 문장을 자꾸 반복해 보자 익힐 때까지.

Lastly, it's very convenient to carry the notebook because it's so light. I can put it in my bag without any difficulties owing to the weight.

For the more how good the shape is! (BETTER: Moreover, its shape is good.)

14. 아하! 세련된 표현은 요렇게 해야 하는구나. 외우잣.

Moreover, its shape is good.

When I use the (a) camera for the (taking) pictures(,) it's very inconvenient to carry it(,) but when I use it(X) a cellular phone, it's so convenient.

15. 일반적인 거니까 여긴 정관사가 아닌 부정관사 붙이기.

When I use a camera for....

16. 사진을 찍는 데 사용하는 거니까 taking pictures가 되어야지.

When I use a camera for taking pictures,

17. When으로 시작되는 문장 끝에 콤마!!!

18. but 앞에 반드시 콤마!!!

19. a cellular phone 가 나오니까 it은 필요 없지.

4. 그리고 딸려온 멘트.

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오홋. 열심히 하겠습니다! 하하

Notes: 1. These conjunctive adverbs have comma (,) right after them:

20. 아래 접속부사 다음엔 반드시 콤마를 쓸 것.

in addition, next, also, again, furthermore, nevertheless, however, instead, in spite of, therefore

in addition, next, also, again, furthermore, nevertheless, however, instead, in spite of, therefore

conjunctive adverbs : 접속 부사

2. When and, but, and so (coordinating conjunctions) are at the middle of two independent clauses, we usually add a comma BEFORE it.

and, but, and so 같은 등위접속사가 두 개의 독립된 문장 사이에 올 때는 그 앞에 콤마를 써준다.

coordinating conjunctions : 등위 접속사

5. 첨삭받은 대로 고쳐 쓴 글.

Overall, Samsung is the better company. The reason why I think so is that I'm a Korean. In fact, I don't have much information about Apple. Therefore, it's very difficult for me to say which one is better between Apple and Samsung. Without any exact reason, I always insist that Samsung is the best. It may be my wish to insist Samsung is the best because I'm a Korean. I manage a blog, and it makes me fond of the brand. Let me give examples. First, when I post articles and pictures, I'm very comfortable using my Samsung phone and laptop. Second, the camera of a Samsung cellular phone has great functions enough to post very good pictures in the blog. Lastly, it's very convenient to carry the notebook because it's so light. I can put it in my bag without any difficulties owing to the weight. It's so light. Moreover, its shape is good. I always admire it. When I use a camera for taking pictures, it's very inconvenient to carry it, but when I use a cellular phone, it's so convenient.

(사진: 꽃 뜰)