What is a typical meal
from your country?
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What is a typical meal from your country?
1. 내가 쓴 글
I would like to say that beef bone soup is a unique Korean food. Because my husband likes it very much. It's not the first time I've been married and I've succeeded in making this beef bone soup. because it smelled too much. To get rid of the smell, I then dipped the bones in boiling water, took them out, and discarded the water. It was again immersed in boiling water and boiled for a long time. I brewed it three times in this way to make an immaculate bone broth. It's not just about boiling it three times. Boil it once, put the boiled broth into another container, pour in new water again, boil the bones, and pour the water into the place where I poured the boiling water for the first time. Mix all the water that has been boiled three times and put it in the refrigerator to cool it down, and the oil hardens white on top. If I skim it off, boil the soup again, add plenty of green onions, and add salt to make delicious beef bone soup. We call it 'Sagol Kug'. My husband and I like it so much.
2. 첨삭되어 온 글
I would like to say that beef bone soup is a unique Korean food.(X) Because(because) my husband likes it very much. It's not the first time I've been married(,) and I've succeeded in making this beef bone soup.(X) because it smelled too much. To get rid of the smell, I then dipped the bones in boiling water, took them out, and discarded the water. It was again immersed in boiling water and(X) (I) boiled (them again) for a long time(, repeating this process).(X) I brewed it(X) three times in this way(X) to make an immaculate bone broth. It's not just about boiling it three times(;).(X) (I) Boil(boil) it once, put the boiled broth into another container, pour in new water again, boil the bones, and pour the water into the place where I poured the boiling water for the first time. (I) Mix(mix) all the water that has been boiled three times and put it in the refrigerator to cool it down, and the oil hardens white on top. If I skim it off, boil the soup again, add plenty of green onions, and add(X) salt to make delicious beef bone soup. We call it 'Sagol Kug(.)'.(X) My husband and I like it so much.
3. 내가 기억해야 할 것들
I would like to say that beef bone soup is a unique Korean food.(X) Because(because) my husband likes it very much.
1. 문장이 길어서 일단 끊고 봤는데 because의 경우 그냥 붙여서 한 문장으로 써줘야 하는구나. I would like to say that beef bone soup is a unique Korean food because my husband likes it very much.
It's not the first time I've been married(,) and I've succeeded in making this beef bone soup.(X) because it smelled too much.
2. 여기서 또 because를 따로 빼는 실수를 했구나. 기억하자. because는 그냥 문장 속에 함께 쓴다. 그리고 and 앞에는 반드시 콤마가 필요하다는 것을 기억하자. It's not the first time I've been married, and I've succeeded in making this beef bone soup.(X) because it smelled too much.
It was again immersed in boiling water and(X) (I) boiled (them again) for a long time(, repeating this process).(X) I brewed it(X) three times in this way(X) to make an immaculate bone broth.
3. and 자체가 필요 없구나. boiled다음에 목적어 them을 넣어주고 다시 끓이다니까 again도 넣어주자. 이 과정을 계속 반복하면서... 요건 콤마와 함께 ing로 써주면 되는구나. It was again immersed in boiling water I boiled them again for a long time, repeating this process I brewed it to make an immaculate bone broth.
It's not just about boiling it three times(;).(X) (I) Boil(boil) it once, put the boiled broth into another container, pour in new water again, boil the bones, and pour the water into the place where I poured the boiling water for the first time.
4. 쎄미콜론을 쓸 줄 알아야 한다. It's not just about boiling it three times; I boil it once, put the boiled broth into another container, pour in new water again, boil the bones, and pour the water into the place where I poured the boiling water for the first time.
(I) Mix(mix) all the water that has been boiled three times and put it in the refrigerator to cool it down, and the oil hardens white on top.
5. I를 써서 문장을 시작하는구나. I mix all the water that has been boiled three times and put it in the refrigerator to cool it down, and the oil hardens white on top.
If I skim it off, boil the soup again, add plenty of green onions, and add(X) salt to make delicious beef bone soup. We call it 'Sagol Kug(.)'.
6. add를 두 번씩 쓸 필요는 없구나. 오호 그리고 문장 전체 마침표를 작은따옴표 사골국 안에 찍어주네. 미국엔 작은따옴표가 없다고 들었는데. 에고 모르겠다. 그냥 하라는 대로. 하하. If I skim it off, boil the soup again, add plenty of green onions, and salt to make delicious beef bone soup. We call it 'Sagol Kug.'
4. 그리고 딸려온 멘트
You've done an excellent job in showing your eagerness to participate in the discussion! When you write, think about employing proper capitalization and punctuation, along with more vivid language and specific examples to add depth and significance to your writing. Your essay serves as a fantastic foundation, and by incorporating additional details and context, it could become even more captivating and informative. Keep up the impressive work!
오홋. 나의 글이 매혹적이며 유용하다니. 하하 넵! 열심히 하겠습니다.
captivating 매혹적인
informative 유익한, 유용한 정보를 주는.
5. 첨삭받은 대로 새로 고쳐 쓴 글
I would like to say that beef bone soup is a unique Korean food because my husband likes it very much. It's not the first time I've been married, and I've succeeded in making this beef bone soup because it smelled too much. To get rid of the smell, I then dipped the bones in boiling water, took them out, and discarded the water. It was again immersed in boiling water I boiled them again for a long time, repeating this process I brewed it to make an immaculate bone broth. It's not just about boiling it three times; I boil it once, put the boiled broth into another container, pour in new water again, boil the bones, and pour the water into the place where I poured the boiling water for the first time. I mix all the water that has been boiled three times and put it in the refrigerator to cool it down, and the oil hardens white on top. If I skim it off, boil the soup again, add plenty of green onions, and salt to make delicious beef bone soup. We call it 'Sagol Kug.' My husband and I like it so much.
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