Why did he get all of them?
17일이 무슨 마법의 날처럼 나의 모든 걸 제한한다. 그런데 띵똥~ 첨삭이 완료되었습니다가 온다. 이것에는 또 내가 약하다. 그래서 잠깐 집중한다. 따로 주제가 없고 아무거나 자유롭게 쓰는 것이었다. 그대로 두면 사라지기에 잠깐 짬을 내 기록한다. 자잘한 거지만 티끌모아 태산이라고 이렇게 조금씩 하다 보면 무언가 이루어지겠지. 이제 이룰 게 무어 있을까. 이루어지는 게 없으면 또 어떠랴. 일부러 영어 배우러도 다니는데 이렇게 집에서 전화로 외국인과 통화하고 그렇게 잊지 않으면 그것만으로도 의미 있지 않을까. 그래서 난 오늘도 띵동~ 첨삭이 완료되었습니다에 맥을 못 추고 어찌 수정되었는가 읽으며 기쁘다.
When we were playing golf, I was very curious as to why he would do such things. Let me tell you in detail.
We played golf with the members and friend of my husband and my friend. Originally, we were going to play golf with my husband,I, the friend of my husband and his wife. But she suddenly had something to do, so she wasn't able to stay with us. So I called my friend suddenly. So it was a very strange team.
Any way, my friend brought cookies, and we ate them while playing golf. My husband, my friend, and I sat on the back seat of the golf cart, and the friend of my husband sat alone in the front seat with the caddie. While we were eating the cookies at the back seat, I told the friend of my husband to eat them together many times, and at first, he didn't show any interest in those cookies, but after a few holes, he suddenly brought the cookies to the front seat and ate alone. I was surprised while we were eating them together, and there were still a lot left. Why did he get all of them?
내가 좋아하는 친절한 멘트가 딸려왔다.
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Notes:
1. We do not shift from one tense to another if the time frame for each action or state is the same. We do not want to have one time period being described in two different tenses. For example:
Yesterday we walk to school but later rode the bus home. (NOT CORRECT)
Yesterday we walked to school but later rode the bus home. (CORRECT)
2. When and, but, and so (coordinating conjunctions) are at the middle of long independent clauses, we usually add a comma BEFORE it.
시제는 항상 매우 중요하며 그 문장 내에서는 반드시 시제가 같아야만 한다는 걸 기억하자. 그리고 잘 안되지만 and, but, so 다음에 오는 문장이 길면 꼭 앞에 콤마를 붙이도록 하자. 오케이.
