Do you smoke?
Why or why not?
Today’s Topic
Do you smoke? Why or why not?
1. 내가 쓴 글
No, I don't smoke at all. The reason why I don't smoke is as follows: It was a very gloomy day. My best friend K invited me to her room after the examination when we were in 2nd grade in middle school. She told me that she had something to show me. I was very curious. I waited. She brought an estray, put water in it, pulled out the cigarette from the depths of the desk drawer, looked at me, and lit the cigarette. She breathed deeply, closed the eyes, and told me that it was fantastic. She asked me to join her while giving me a cigarette. She pressed me to smoke it. But I said "No!" I knew that I had not to do it. My parents always said to me "Smoking is bad. You should not do such bad things." My brother was scolded many times from parents for smoking. I saw it so I thought not to do it. I might be almost brainwashed by my parents not to smoke. But I understood so allowed her to smoke in front of me. She was so disappointed but I never could do it.
2. 첨삭되어 온 글
No, I don't smoke at all. The reason why I don't smoke is as follows: (I am going to write why I do not smoke.) It was a very gloomy day. My best friend K invited me to her room after the examination when we were in 2nd grade in middle school. She told me that she had something to show me. I was very curious. I waited. She brought an estray(ashtray), put water in it, pulled out the (a) cigarette from the depths (depth) of the desk drawer, looked at me, and lit the cigarette. She breathed deeply, closed the (her) eyes, and told me that it was fantastic. She asked me to join her while giving me a cigarette. She pressed me to smoke it. But I said "No!" I knew that I had(should) notto(X) do it. My parents always said to(told) me(,) "Smoking is bad. You should not do such bad things." My brother was scolded many times from(by my) parents for smoking. I saw it so I thought not to do it. I might be(have been) almost brainwashed by my parents not to smoke. But I understood (my friend,) so (I) allowed her to smoke in front of me. She was so disappointed(,) but I (could) never could (X) do it.
3. 내가 기억해야할 것들
ㄱ. 패턴을 좀 바꾸어보자. 항상 as follows: 어쩌구저쩌구 했는데 이젠 다른 방법을 써보는 거다. 요렇게.
I am going to write why I do not smoke.
ㄴ.아, 어떻게 요런 걸 틀릴까? 나두 참.
She brought an ashtray, put water in it, pulled out a cigarette from the depth of the desk drawer, looked at me, and lit the cigarette.
ㄷ. 특별히 정해진 담배가 아니라 일반적인 담배를 말하는 거니까 정관사가 아닌 관사를 붙인다.
She brought an ashtray, put water in it, pulled out a cigarette from the depth of the desk drawer, looked at me, and lit the cigarette.
ㄹ. 깊은 곳. 함부로 복수화하지 말지어다.
She brought an ashtray, put water in it, pulled out a cigarette from the depth of the desk drawer, looked at me, and lit the cigarette.
ㅁ. 그 눈이 아니라 그녀의 눈. 그렇지.
She breathed deeply, closed her eyes, and told me that it was fantastic.
ㅂ. 뭐뭐 하지 말아야한다엔 should 를 쓴다. 그리고 should 다음엔 동사 원형이다.
그렇지. 거기 왜 to가 들어가냐. 나두 참참참.
But I said "No!" I knew that I should not do it.
ㅅ. 이럴 때 언제나 told 쓴다는 것을 기억하자. 외우자 그냥.
My parents always told me, "Smoking is bad. You should not do such bad things."
ㅇ. 따옴표 전엔 항상 콤마를 쓰자.
My parents always told me(,) "Smoking is bad. You should not do such bad things."
ㅈ. 누구로부터 야단맞다니까 from을 썼는데 노노노 by 를 쓸 것.
My brother was scolded many times by my parents for smoking.
ㅊ. 세뇌되어 왔던 것 같다니까 딱 부러지는 과거형 아닌 계속되는 완료형을 쓴다.
I might have been almost brainwashed by my parents not to smoke.
ㅌ. 함부로 생략하면 안된다. 목적어와 주어를 구체적으로 써준다.
But I understood my friend, so I allowed her to smoke in front of me.
ㅍ. but 앞에는 반드시 콤마!
She was so disappointed(,) but I could never do it.
ㅎ. 쿠드 네버! 순서를 잘 기억하자!
She was so disappointed, but I could never do it.
4. 첨삭 받은 대로 고쳐 쓴 글
No, I don't smoke at all. I am going to write why I do not smoke. It was a very gloomy day. My best friend K invited me to her room after the examination when we were in 2nd grade in middle school. She told me that she had something to show me. I was very curious. I waited. She brought an ashtray, put water in it, pulled out a cigarette from the depth of the desk drawer, looked at me, and lit the cigarette. She breathed deeply, closed her eyes, and told me that it was fantastic. She asked me to join her while giving me a cigarette. She pressed me to smoke it. But I said "No!" I knew that I should not do it. My parents always told me, "Smoking is bad. You should not do such bad things." My brother was scolded many times by my parents for smoking. I saw it so I thought not to do it. I might have been almost brainwashed by my parents not to smoke. But I understood my friend, so I allowed her to smoke in front of me. She was so disappointed, but I could never do it.
5. 딸려온 특별 멘트 (내가 무척 좋아하는 히히)
Thank you for accomplishing Step 4.
You were able to construct simple and complete sentences. However, there are still other sentence patterns that you have to be familiar with. You can start with the simple patterns then proceed to longer and more complex ones. Also, please be mindful with the use of function words such as prepositions and articles. These are very tricky words, but if you get more familiar with them, you can easily use them in sentences.
Keep writing!
넵. 새로운 유형에 익숙해지겠습니다. 전치사 같은 문법 기능어를 자유롭게 쓸 수 있도록 노력하겠습니다. 파이팅!!! 푸하하하
function 기능
function word 문법 기능어
mindful ...을 염두에 두는
preposition 전치사
articles 규약
tricky 힘든, 까다로운
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