Do you enjoy meeting

new people?

Today’s Topic

Do you enjoy meeting new people? If you do or don't, tell me why.

1. 내가 쓴 글

Yes, I do. Let me tell you why I enjoy meeting new people. One day I received a telephone call from the high school of my second son inviting me to the meeting. I wondered. Why? My son already graduated from that school. Then why? I think It's none of my business anymore. They invited the chairman only every year. It was a parents' meeting to help our sons' alumnus. That school was newly built so alumnus was also very week. So the parents gathered to help the alumnus until it would stand strongly. There were so many rich and powerful members. They talked about school and scholarship etc. It's very boring but after that formal meeting, with a delicious meal, we started talking about private things, not schools. It was very interesting. And I felt very convenient even though I was so nervous at first. No matter how rich or powerful, they all had similar concerns. That is the attractive point of meeting new people. The more we talk to each other, the more we get to know each other and become more comfortable. So I enjoy meeting new people.

2. 첨삭되어온 글

Yes, I do. Let me tell you why I enjoy meeting new people. One day I received a telephone call from the high school of my second son inviting me to the meeting. I wondered. Why? My son already graduated from that school. Then why? I think It's none of my business anymore. They invited the chairman only every year. It was a parents' meeting to help our sons' alumnus. That school was newly built so alumnus was also very week(weak). So the parents gathered to help the alumnus(alumni) until it would stand strongly.

There were so many rich and powerful members. They talked about school(,) and(X) scholarship(,) etc. It's very boring but after that formal meeting, with a delicious meal, we started talking about private things, not schools. It was very interesting. And I felt very convenient even though I was so nervous at first. No matter how rich or powerful, they all had similar concerns. That is the attractive point of meeting new people. The more we talk to each other, the more we get to know each other and become more comfortable. So I enjoy meeting new people.

3. 내가 기억해야될 것들

ㄱ. 흐흐 요런 걸 틀리다니.

week 는 한 주

weak 는 약하다.

ㄴ. 요거 확실히 좀 해두자.

alumnus: 남자 졸업생(단수)

alumni: 졸업생들(복수)

an alumni reunion 동창회

alumni association 동창회

ㄷ. etc. 엔 and가 특별히 필요없다. 콤마로만.

They talked about school(,) and(X) scholarship(,) etc.

ㄹ. 장학금 스펠링 정확히.

scholarship: 장학금

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5. 첨삭을 반영해 새로 고쳐 쓴 글

Yes, I do. Let me tell you why I enjoy meeting new people. One day I received a telephone call from the high school of my second son inviting me to the meeting. I wondered. Why? My son already graduated from that school. Then why? I think It's none of my business anymore. They invited the chairman only every year. It was a parents' meeting to help our sons' alumnus. That school was newly built so alumnus was also very weak. So the parents gathered to help the alumni until it would stand strongly.

There were so many rich and powerful members. They talked about school(,) scholarship(,) etc. It's very boring but after that formal meeting, with a delicious meal, we started talking about private things, not schools. It was very interesting. And I felt very convenient even though I was so nervous at first. No matter how rich or powerful, they all had similar concerns. That is the attractive point of meeting new people. The more we talk to each other, the more we get to know each other and become more comfortable. So I enjoy meeting new people.

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