영작 Today’s Topic

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1) 내가 쓴 글

I want to say about my best friend until now from high school. She was very next to me in the choir in high school because she and I were the tallest among other members. That school choir was so famous that it was very difficult to pass the entrance exam. She and I were not so good at singing but passed because that choir needs not only singing talent but also the grade of school. She and I wanted to be one of that choir because the life of it looked so good. Anyway, we don't sing well so we became to belong to the Alto part. She and I did many other things during the singing class such as talking our private things in secret. And we had many delicious things in secret. When we became the 3rd grade, we had concentrated not on the study but on the eating. We said that we had to eat well to prepare the entrance exam to the university. We thought that it is the most important to eat well so we brought 4 lunchboxes and we ate them so well even during class time in secret. We became fat.

2) 첨삭받은 글

I want to say (something) about my best friend until now(whom I have been friend to) from high school. She was very next to me in the choir in high school because she and I were the tallest among other members. That school choir was so famous that it was very difficult to pass the entrance exam. She and I were not so good at singing(,) but passed because that choir needs not only singing talent but also the (X) grade of (from) school (subjects). She and I (Actually, we) wanted to be one of (the members of) that choir because the life of it looked so good(what do you mean by this?). Anyway, we don't sing well so we became to belong to the Alto part. She and I did many other things during the singing class such as talking (about) our private things(matters) in secret. And(Additionally,) we had many delicious things in secret. When we became the(reached our) 3rd grade, we had concentrated not on the (our studies) study (,) but on the (X) eating (as well). We said that we had to eat well to prepare (for) the entrance exam to the university. We thought that it is (to eat well was) the most important to eat well(for us,) so we brought 4 (four) lunchboxes and we ate them so well even during class time in secret. We became fat.

3) 내가 기억해야 할 것들

1. 타동사를 쓸 땐 목적어를 꼭 넣어주어야 한다.

I want to say (something) about my best friend whom I have been friend to from high school.

2. 학교 때부터 지금까지 친구... 간단히 분사형으로 해결되는구나. 굳이 until now를 쓰지 않아도.

I want to say something about my best friend until now(whom I have been friend to) from high school.

3. but 앞에 콤마 빠트리지 말 것.

She and I were not so good at singing(,) but passed because that choir needs not only singing talent but also grade from school subjects.

4. 학교 성적을 보다는 이렇게 표현하는구나. 여긴 왜 관사를 빼야 할까.

She and I were not so good at singing, but passed because that choir needs not only singing talent but also the (X) grade of (from) school (subjects).

5. 대명사로 쓸 수 있을 땐 과감히 대명사로!

She and I (Actually, we) wanted to be one of the members of that choir because the life of it looked so good.

6. 멤버 중 하나를 표현할 땐 꼭 멤버즈를 써 줄 것. 우리말로 합창단의 일원... 해서 그냥 썼더니 아닌가 보다. 꼭 멤버즈를 넣어줄 것. 오케이.

We wanted to be one of (the members of) that choir because the life of it looked so good.

7. 그들의 생활이 좋아 보여서...라는 뜻으로 쓴 건데 무슨 뜻이냐고 물으니 내참. 에고. the life of it 이 아니라 the life of them이라고 했어야 하는 걸까?

We wanted to be one of the members of that choir because the life of it looked so good(what do you mean by this?).

8. talk 다음에는 반드시 about. 외우자. talking about 흐흐

She and I did many other things during the singing class such as talking (about) our private matters in secret.

9. 우리의 사소한 일... matters로 쓰자.

She and I did many other things during the singing class such as talking about our private things(matters) in secret.

10. 그리고 또. 꼭 And 만이 아니라 Additionally도 쓰도록 하자.

And(Additionally,) we had many delicious things in secret.

11. 3학년이 되었을 때... became이 아니라 reached 오호.

When we became the(reached our) 3rd grade, we had concentrated not on our studies, but on eating as well.

12. but 앞에 콤마. 정관사 안 붙인다.

When we reached our 3rd grade, we had concentrated not on the (our studies) study (,) but on the (X) eating (as well).

13. prepare for 기억하자.

We said that we had to eat well to prepare (for) the entrance exam to the university.

14. it... to... 용법을 아무 데나 쓰는 게 아니구나.

We thought that it is (to eat well was) the most importantto eat well(for us,) so we brought four lunchboxes and we ate them so well even during class time in secret.

15. 10 아래 숫자는 아라비아 숫자로 쓰지 않는다.

We thought that to eat well was the most important for us, so we brought 4 (four) lunchboxes and we ate them so well even during class time in secret.

4) 첨삭받은 대로 새로 쓴 글

I want to say something about my best friend whom I have been friend to from high school. She was very next to me in the choir in high school because she and I were the tallest among other members. That school choir was so famous that it was very difficult to pass the entrance exam. She and I were not so good at singing, but passed because that choir needs not only singing talent but also grade from school subjects. We wanted to be one of the members of that choir because the life of it looked so good. Anyway, we don't sing well so we became to belong to the Alto part. She and I did many other things during the singing class such as talking about our private matters in secret. Additionally, we had many delicious things in secret. When we reached our 3rd grade, we had concentrated not on our studies, but on eating as well. We said that we had to eat well to prepare for the entrance exam to the university. We thought that to eat well was the most important for us, so we brought four lunchboxes and we ate them so well even during class time in secret. We became fat.

5) 그리고 딸려온 내가 좋아하는 특별 멘트

Thank you for completing Step 4.

Great job! The subject matter was clearly addressed in your written work. You just have to go over and check if your word choice and tenses are appropriate. You are learning a lot, so there is nothing to worry about. Sooner or later, you will have an impressive command of English. You can do it step by step.

We look forward to your next essays. :)

하핫 칭찬은 언제나 기분이 좋다. 나의 다음 글을 기다린다니... 푸하하하 아, 좋아라.

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