How is city life convenient

and helpful?

Today’s Topic

How is city life convenient and helpful and how does it serve as a disadvantage?

1. 내가 쓴 글

I like city life so much. How convenient it is. There are so many convenient traffic systems, so we can get to any places where we want to go to. There are so many good libraries where we can read many books. There are so good theaters where we can watch good movies and musicals. And also it has a good cultural center where we can listen to the music from the City Orchestra. Until at late night, we can enjoy our talking with friends on the cafe or on the bar because there are so many restaurants open until late. It's very convenient and very helpful for me. But it serves as a disadvantage either. We have to wait on the road for a long time because of the traffic jam and it made very bad air for us. We drunk so much with friends until very late at night because of such Restaurants open until late at night. Still, it's very interesting and helpful for me to talk and drink with friends until very late at night. City life is very convenient and helpful, so I can ignore any disadvantage of it. I like city life.

2. 첨삭되어 온 글

I like city life so much. How convenient it is. There are so many convenient traffic systems, (transportation modes,) so we can get to any places where we want to go to. There are so many good libraries where we can read many books. There are so good (well-managed) theaters where we can watch good movies and musicals. And also(,) it has a good cultural center where we can listen to the music from (of) the City Orchestra. (city orchestra.) Until at late night, we can enjoy our(X) talking with (our) friends on the (at a) cafe or on the (at a) bar because there are so many restaurants open until late. It's very convenient and very helpful for me.

But it serves as a disadvantage either. (as well.) We have to wait on the road for a long time because of the traffic jam(,) and it made very bad air for us. (we can't help breathing in bad air.) We drunk (drink) so much with friends until very late at night because of such Restaurants (restaurants that are) open until late at night.

Still, it's very interesting and helpful for me to talk and drink with (my) friends until very late at night. City life is very convenient and helpful, so I can ignore any disadvantage of it. I like city life.

3. 내가 기억해야 할 것들

1) 대중교통 시스템 transportation modes라고 해야 하는구나.

There are so many convenient traffic systems, (transportation modes,) so we can get to any places where we want to go to.

2) 오호 좋은 극장들 요건 well-managed로. 오케이.

There are so good (well-managed) theaters where we can watch good movies and musicals.

3) and also 다음엔 콤마.

And also(,) it has a good cultural center where we can listen to the music of the city orchestra.

4) 오케스트라는 소문자로 city orchestra, 오케스트라의 음악은 of로

And also, it has a good cultural center where we can listen to the music from (of) the City Orchestra. (city orchestra.)

5) 우리의 이야기가 아니라 이야기를 즐겼다 우리 친구들과. enjoy talking with our friends

Until at late night, we can enjoy our(X) talking with (our) friends at a cafe or at a bar because there are so many restaurants open until late.

6) at a cafe, at a bar 기억하자. on을 어떻게 썼을까. 내참.

Until at late night, we can enjoy talking with our friends on the (at a) cafe or on the (at a) bar because there are so many restaurants open until late.

7) 역시.. 로도 작용한다 할 때는 as well 기억하자.

But it serves as a disadvantage either. (as well.)

8) and 앞에는 콤마를!

We have to wait on the road for a long time because of the traffic jam(,) and we can't help breathing in bad air.

9) 훨씬 세련된 표현 외우자. We can't help breathing in bad air.

We have to wait on the road for a long time because of the traffic jam, and it made very bad air for us. (we can't help breathing in bad air.)

10) 일반적인 건 현재 시제로.

We drunk (drink) so much with friends until very late at night because of such restaurants that are open until late at night.

11) 설명할 땐 that을 넣어서 such restaurants that are...

We drink so much with friends until very late at night because of such Restaurants (restaurants that are) open until late at night.

12) 그냥 친구가 아니라 나의 친구

Still, it's very interesting and helpful for me to talk and drink with (my) friends until very late at night.

4. 첨삭받은 대로 다시 고쳐 쓴 글

I like city life so much. How convenient it is. There are so many convenient transportation modes, so we can get to any places where we want to go to. There are so many good libraries where we can read many books. There are well-managed theaters where we can watch good movies and musicals. And also, it has a good cultural center where we can listen to the music of the city orchestra. Until at late night, we can enjoy talking with our friends at a cafe or at a bar because there are so many restaurants open until late. It's very convenient and very helpful for me.

But it serves as a disadvantage as well. We have to wait on the road for a long time because of the traffic jam, and we can't help breathing in bad air. We drink so much with friends until very late at night because of such restaurants that are open until late at night.

Still, it's very interesting and helpful for me to talk and drink with my friends until very late at night. City life is very convenient and helpful, so I can ignore any disadvantage of it. I like city life.

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