What do you do

in your spare time?

Today’s Topic

What do you do in your spare time?

1. 내가 쓴 글

I read a very interesting love storybook with coffee and very delicious cookies in my spare time. And I write an article on brunch, which is a very famous SNS nowadays for the person who wants to write articles. I write many kinds of stories on there such as my school day's diary, my mind with my husband, and the regrets what I have done. When I get angry, I write an article about my feeling then I can see my anger has disappeared. It's a kind of miracle so I like reading and writing. When I was angry or very gloomy in my school days, I hurried to go to the jongro book store, which is the biggest bookstore in Seoul at that time. I read many books in the corner of newly published books until I found the book that showed my mind of that time exactly. I bought that book and returned home and read it with coffee and delicious cookies, then all of my anger or gloomy were disappeared. How wonderful it is to read the book that shows my mind exactly. Therefore I like reading and writing in my spare time.

2. 첨삭되어 온 글

I read a very interesting love storybook with coffee and very delicious cookies in my spare time. And I write an article on brunch, which is a very famous SNS nowadays for the person who wants to write articles. I write many kinds(OR: sorts) of stories on there such as my school day's diary, my mind with my husband, and the regrets what (that) I have done. When I get angry, I write an article about my feeling then I can see my anger has disappeared. It's a kind of miracle(,) so I like reading and writing. When I was angry or very gloomy in my school days, I hurried to go to the jongro book store, which is the biggest bookstore in Seoul at that time. I read many books in the corner of newly published books until I found the book that showed my mind of that time exactly. I bought that book and returned home and read it with coffee and delicious cookies, then all of my anger or gloomy (feelings) were disappeared. How wonderful it is to read the (a) book that shows my mind exactly. Therefore(,) I like reading and writing in my spare time.

3. 기억해야 할 것들

1) 많은 종류라는 것을 꼭 kinds만 말고 sorts도 써보도록 하자.

I write many kinds(OR: sorts) of stories on there such as my school day's diary, my mind with my husband, and the regrets what (that) I have done.

2) that을 써야 하는 확실한 이유. 그 이하를 빼면 말이 안 된다.

I write many sorts of stories on there such as my school day's diary, my mind with my husband, and the regrets what (that) I have done.

3) so앞에 콤마

It's a kind of miracle(,) so I like reading and writing.

4) 우울은 형용사니까 명사를 적어주어야지.

I bought that book and returned home and read it with coffee and delicious cookies, then all of my anger or gloomy (feelings) were disappeared.

5) 내 마음을 보여주는 그 어떤 책이니까 부정관사 a

How wonderful it is to read the (a) book that shows my mind exactly.

6) Therefore 다음엔 콤마

Therefore(,) I like reading and writing in my spare time.

4. 첨삭받은 대로 고쳐 쓴 글

I read a very interesting love storybook with coffee and very delicious cookies in my spare time. And I write an article on brunch, which is a very famous SNS nowadays for the person who wants to write articles. I write many sorts of stories on there such as my school day's diary, my mind with my husband, and the regrets that I have done. When I get angry, I write an article about my feeling then I can see my anger has disappeared. It's a kind of miracle, so I like reading and writing. When I was angry or very gloomy in my school days, I hurried to go to the jongro book store, which is the biggest bookstore in Seoul at that time. I read many books in the corner of newly published books until I found the book that showed my mind of that time exactly. I bought that book and returned home and read it with coffee and delicious cookies, then all of my anger or gloomy feelings were disappeared. How wonderful it is to read a book that shows my mind exactly. Therefore, I like reading and writing in my spare time.

5. 그리고 딸려온 내가 좋아하는 특별 멘트

It's another great day!~ Thank you so much for spending some time to finish Step 4. You wrote incredible ideas with complex sentences. A very few slips were corrected, but we are grateful to give you some reminders. Please continue to write more essays. Have a safe day!~~

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