Do you enjoy traveling?
Today’s Topic
Do you enjoy traveling? How often do you go travel?
1. 내가 쓴 글
Yes, I enjoy traveling. I have gone travel almost twice a year. Nowadays I couldn't go on any travel because of Covid19. I miss the days that whenever we want to go, we can go travel anywhere. Every wintertime, we, who usually my husband and the colleagues of his company before his retiring and their wives total about 20 members, went to Thailand or Malaysia to play golf for a month. It is great. What we do there is only playing golf and talking together. It is the heaven of all wives. We don't have to clean the house, make dishes, and do laundry. Therefore we, especially wives are waiting for Winters. But now we couldn't go there even in Winter because of Covid19. When will it disappear? I miss those days in Thailand. I just woke up and went to the Restaurant and had breakfast and played golf and returned to the hotel. Then there was a very delicious lunch prepared for us. And we went out to play golf again and returned to the hotel, then there was a good dinner prepared for us. We talked about today's golf for a long time. How wonderful it was!
2. 첨삭되어 온 글
Yes, I enjoy traveling. I have gone(used to) travel almost twice a year. Nowadays I couldn't(can't) go on any(a) travel because of Covid19.(COVID-19.) I miss the days that whenever we want(when anytime we wanted) to go, we can go(could) travel anywhere.
Every wintertime, we, who usually(usually consist of) my husband and the colleagues of his company(his company colleagues) before his retiring and(retirement together with) their wives(, a) total about(of) 20 members, went(used to go) to Thailand or Malaysia to play golf for a month. It is(was) great. What we do there is(did there were) only playing golf and talking together. It is the(was) heaven of(for) all wives. We don't(didn't) have to clean the house, make (the) dishes, and do (the) laundry. Therefore(,) we, especially wives(,) are waiting for Winters.(winter.)
But now we couldn't(can't) go there even in Winter(winter) because of Covid19.(COVID-19.) When will it disappear? I miss those days in Thailand. I just woke(had to wake) up(,) and went(go) to the Restaurant and had(a restaurant, have) breakfast(,) and played golf and returned(play golf, and return) to the hotel. Then there was a(would be) very delicious lunch prepared for us. And we went(would go) out to play golf again and returned(return) to the hotel, then(hotel. Then) there was (already) a good dinner prepared for us.
We talked about today's(playing) golf for a long time (today). How wonderful it was!
캬~ 어쩜 이렇게 많이 틀렸을까? 하이고 오오오
3. 내가 기억해야 할 것들
I have gone(used to) travel almost twice a year.
난 일 년에 두 번 정도 여행을 했다 할 땐 heve gone 이 아니라 used to구나. 그렇지.
Nowadays I couldn't(can't) go on any(a) travel because of Covid19.(COVID-19.)
Nowadays니까 현재형을 써야 하겠지. can't
그 어떤 여행도...라는 생각에 any를 썼는데 a travel이라 해야 하네.
코로나 정확하게 쓰는 법을 알아두자. COVID-19
I miss the days that whenever we want(when anytime we wanted) to go, we can go(could) travel anywhere.
I miss the days when anytime we wanted to go,
we could travel anywhere.
우리가 가고 싶을 때 언제나 여행할 수 있었던 때를 그리워한다.
라는 세련된 문장을 요렇게 살짝 외워 두기로 하자.
Every wintertime, we, who usually(usually consist of) my husband and the colleagues of his company(his company colleagues) before his retiring and(retirement together with) their wives(, a) total about(of) 20 members, went(used to go) to Thailand or Malaysia to play golf for a month.
남편과 직장 동료들로 구성된... 일 때 이렇게 쓰는구나.
consist of
직장동료는 간단히 his company colleagues라고 쓰자.
retirement together with their wives
a total of 20 members
총 20여 명 할 때 이렇게 쓰고.
가곤 했었던 때.
used to go to Thailand...
It is(was) great.
시제를 항상 잘 기억하자. 과거엔 과거를!
It was great.
What we do there is(did there were) only playing golf and talking together.
시제를 항상 신경 쓰자.
What we did there were only playing golf and talking together.
It is the(was) heaven of(for) all wives.
시제! 꼭 신경 쓰자.
아내들을 위한! 이면 of 가 아니라 for!
We don't(didn't) have to clean the house, make (the) dishes, and do (the) laundry.
시제!
요리하다는 make the dishes!
세탁하다에도 관사를 꼭 붙여줘야 하는구나. 그치! do the laundry!
Therefore(,) we, especially wives(,) are waiting for Winters.(winter.)
Therefore 뒤에는 콤마
문장 사이에 설명 넣을 때도 콤마.
계절은 대문자 노노노! 계절은 소문자로.
But now we couldn't(can't) go there even in Winter(winter) because of Covid19.(COVID-19.)
now니까 당연 현재형이어야지!
계절은 소문자. 외우자.
코로나 정확히. COVID-19
I just woke(had to wake) up(,) and went(go) to the Restaurant and had(a restaurant, have) breakfast(,) and played golf and returned(play golf, and return) to the hotel.
일어나야만 했고 아. 이런 식으로 뒤에는 몽땅 to 부정사 다음의 현재형으로 써주면서 해야 자연스럽게 되는구나. I just had to wake up, go to a restaurant, have breakfast, play golf, and return to the hotel. 아, 정말 깔끔하고 세련된 표현이 된다. 과거형으로 써 내려갈 때보다 앞에 had to로 과거형은 끝내고 뒤엔 모두 to다음의 원형으로 이어주면 되는구나.
콤마를 반드시 챙겨주고. restaurant... 앞에 정관사 the 가 아니고 부정관사 a를 붙일 것이며 쓸데없이 대문자로 쓰지 않는다. 그래. 계절도 소문자로 쓰는 거지. 하이고 어쩜 이리 많이 틀렸을까. 나도 참참참!
Then there was a(would be) very delicious lunch prepared for us.
오호 이럴 경우 맛있는 점심이 있었다! 가 아니라 차려져 있었다... would be로 과거라도 그 문장 따라 이렇게 써주어야 하는구나. 음. 하긴 그냥 was를 썼을 때는 어째 좀 이상하긴 했다. 이럴 때 would를 써주는구나. 아하. 자꾸 이런 문장을 익히도록 하자. Then there would be vevy delicious lunch prepared for us. 아하 그리고 lunch에는 앞에 정관사건 부정관사건 그 어떤 관사도 붙는 게 아니구나. 하이고오오오 언제나 어려운 정관사 부정관사. 붙느냐 안 붙느냐도 항상 헷갈린다. 자꾸 올바른 문장을 보며 익히는 수밖엔 없다.
And we went(would go) out to play golf again and returned(return) to the hotel, then(hotel. Then) there was (already) a good dinner prepared for us.
그래. 확실한 과거형을 쓰지 말고 would go를 써야 한다고.
return to the hotel.로 일단 끊어주는구나.
그러고 나서 Then으로 새로 시작. 오케이.
오호 이럴 때 already를 써주니 뜻이 더 명확해지는구나. 아하~
Then there was already a good dinner prepared for us.
We talked about today's(playing) golf for a long time (today).
오늘의 골프에 대해 많은 이야기를 했다는 뜻으로 today's golf라고 썼는데 하하 요건 아마도 콩글리쉬인가 보다. 세련된 표현을 외워두도록 하자. We talked about playing golf for a long time today. 내가 표현하고자 했던 거랑 조금 뉘앙스가 다른 것 같은데 그래도 첨삭 온 거니 그대로 외우기로 하자.
4. 첨삭받은 대로 고쳐 쓴 글
Yes, I enjoy traveling. I used to travel almost twice a year. Nowadays I can't go on a travel because of COVID-19. I miss the days when anytime we wanted to go, we could travel anywhere.
Every wintertime, we, usually consist of my husband and his company colleagues before his retirement together with their wives, a total of 20 members, used to go to Thailand or Malaysia to play golf for a month. It was great. What we did there were only playing golf and talking together. It was heaven for all wives. We didn't have to clean the house, make the dishes, and do the laundry. Therefore, we, especially wives, are waiting for winter.
But now we can't go there even in winter because of COVID-19. When will it disappear? I miss those days in Thailand. I just had to wake up, go to a restaurant, have breakfast, play golf, and return to the hotel. Then there would be very delicious lunch prepared for us. And we would go out to play golf again and return to the hotel. Then there was already a good dinner prepared for us.
We talked about playing golf for a long time today. How wonderful it was!
5. 그리고 딸려온 특별 멘트
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1. Capitalize days, months, and holidays, but not seasons:
일, 월, 공휴일은 대문자로 쓴다
그러나 계절은 대문자 절대 아니다!
I hate Mondays!
Oh no! I forgot about Valentine’s Day!
The names of seasons are not proper nouns, so there’s no need to capitalize them.
proper nouns:고유명사
나는 월요일을 싫어한다. (대문자)
오 노. 밸런타인데이를 잊었어. (대문자)
계절의 이름은 고유명사가 아니므로 대문자 노노노!
I hate winter!
Having a summer birthday is the best.
나는 겨울을 싫어한다. (대문자 노!)
여름 생일이 최고야. (대문자 노!)
2. Comma is not needed after coordinating conjunctions (such as and, but, so) when they start a sentence. But a comma is needed before them when they are between two clauses. In formal writing or to avoid redundancy, you can use sentence connectors like however, on the other hand, therefore, in addition, etc. instead of coordinating conjunctions to connect two sentences. And we put a comma after them.
coordinating conjunctions: 등위접속사
redundancy: 불필요한 중복
and, but, so 같은 등위접속사가 문장에서 처음으로 시작할 때는 콤마가 필요 없다. 그러나 두 문장 사이에 있을 때는 콤마가 필요하다. 공식 문서나 불필요한 중복을 피하기 위해서는 문장을 연결할 때 등위접속사 대신 however, on the other hand, therefore, in addition, 등을 사용하는 게 좋다. 그때는 뒤에 콤마를 써준다.
EXAMPLES:
Those people are wonderful and optimistic. So hanging out with them helps me a lot.
They are really nice people, so I hang out with them.
I wanted to hang out with them, but I changed my mind at the last minute.
The meeting was scheduled to start at 2 P.M. However, it was postponed because of an urgent matter.
This policy will take effect tomorrow. Therefore, everyone should be aware of it.
The item arrived late last time. Moreover, there was a problem with it.
등위접속사, and, but, so 등은 문장 시작 때 쓰이면 콤마를 쓰지 않는다. 그러나 However, Therefore, Moreover 등은 문장 앞에 써도 콤마를 넣어준다. 아하~
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