What do you usually do
on a long weekend?
Today’s Topic
What do you usually do on a long weekend?
1. 내가 쓴 글
Nowadays, we have a long weekend almost every day because we are all retired from our work. What I mean is that we have every workday as a long weekend. In us, there are no differences from working days to weekend days. So I'll tell you about our routine every day. Fortunately, we have almost the same hobbies so that we do many things together such as playing golf, playing saxophone, listening to music and reading books. We enjoy listening to classical music with a good vacuum tube amplifier and LP records. Almost a day we listen to music and with that music, we read books which we borrow from the best library in our province located near our house. We enjoy visiting the library together and borrow many books to read. Every 4 o'clock a day, we go out to take a walk along the big lake near my house. Once or twice a week we play golf in the Country Club together with his colleagues who worked together when he was at the company. We do many things together as we are friends, not a married couple. We don't need a special long weekend.
2. 첨삭되어 온 글
Nowadays, we have a long weekend almost every day because we are all retired from our work. What I mean is that we have every workday as a long weekend. In (For) us, there are no differences from working days to weekend days (BETTER: weekends). So I'll tell you about our routine every day. Fortunately, we have almost the same hobbies so that we do many things together such as playing golf, playing saxophone, listening to music and reading books. We enjoy listening to classical music with a good vacuum tube amplifier and LP records. Almost a (every) day(,) we listen to music and with that music, we read books which we borrow from the best library in our province located near our house. We enjoy visiting the library together and borrow many books to read. Every 4 o'clock a day, we go out to take a walk along the big lake near my house. Once or twice a week we play golf in the Country Club together with his colleagues who worked together when he was at the company. We do many things together as we are friends, not a married couple. We don't need a special long weekend.
3. 내가 기억해야 할 것들
In (For) us, there are no differences from working days to weekend days (BETTER: weekends).
오호. 이럴 때 For us가 되어야 하는구나. 그치. In us는 그리고 보니 어째 쫌.
weekend days는 weekends로. 오케이.
Almost a (every) day(,) we listen to music and with that music, we read books which we borrow from the best library in our province located near our house.
Almost a day가 아니라 almost every day.... 그치. 그게 매우 자연스럽다. 딱 하루가 아니라 거의 매일이니까. 당연히 Almost every day가 되었어야지. 암.
Almost every day다음엔 콤마를 찍어줘야 하는구나. 오케이.
오마낫. 오늘은 딱 두 문장? 와우~ 헤헤 좋아라.
4. 첨삭받은 대로 고쳐 쓴 글
Nowadays, we have a long weekend almost every day because we are all retired from our work. What I mean is that we have every workday as a long weekend. For us, there are no differences from working days to weekends. So I'll tell you about our routine every day. Fortunately, we have almost the same hobbies so that we do many things together such as playing golf, playing saxophone, listening to music and reading books. We enjoy listening to classical music with a good vacuum tube amplifier and LP records. Almost every day, we listen to music and with that music, we read books which we borrow from the best library in our province located near our house. We enjoy visiting the library together and borrow many books to read. Every 4 o'clock a day, we go out to take a walk along the big lake near my house. Once or twice a week we play golf in the Country Club together with his colleagues who worked together when he was at the company. We do many things together as we are friends, not a married couple. We don't need a special long weekend.
5. 그리고 특별히 딸려온 멘트
Good job! This is a very good piece of work. Your written English flows quite naturally. Sufficient command of grammar and deeper understanding of grammatical rules and constructions allowed you to create accurate sentences. Keep writing! Good luck in your next essay.
오홋 나의 글이 아주 자연스럽게 흘러간다고라. 하하 칭찬. 하이고 기뻐라. 넵! 열심히 쓰겠습니다!!! 하하
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