Are you afraid of getting old?
Explain why or why not.
Today’s Topic
Are you afraid of getting old? Explain why or why not.
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No, I am not afraid of getting old. The reason why I am not afraid is that I'm already old enough. If I follow the flow of time, then everything will be O.K. I'm not afraid of getting old. When I was in middle school, my friend and I were usually talking about this statement: "Do women over 40 still want to live? Let's live short and bold(!)"
But when we turned 40, our thoughts changed and realized that there are more things we could still do. We deserve to live even after we turn 40 years old. Now I feel that every year has a special meaning to live. Each age has attractive things about it depending on the person getting older. I expect what will happen in their future age.
How wonderful it is to get older. I don't care how old I am because I will live by just thinking only now, the present time. I don't care about my future or my past, I just care about now, this moment. It will help me get older without getting scared. How wonderful it is to imagine my 70s and 80s and even more. How wonderful life is whatever my age is.
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No, I am not afraid of getting old. The reason why I am not (afraid) is that I've(I'm) already gotten(X) old enough. If I follow the flow of time(,) then everything would(will) be O.K. I'm not afraid of getting old. When I was in middle school, me and my friend(my friend and I) were usually talking about that(this statement:) "Do women over 40 still want to live? Let's live short and bold(!)"
afraid 반복할 필요 없는 것 같아 생략했는데 여기까진 써줘야 하는구나.
그냥 I'm already old라고 하면 되는구나. 완료형 그런 거 필요 없네.
then 앞에 콤마 써준다.
If 가정법엔 무조건 과거를 쓴다가 머릿속에 박혀있어 would를 썼는데 그거 아닌가 보다. 아무거나 가정법이 아닌가 보다. 그냥 세월 가는 대로 따라가면 만사 오케이일 거야. 하는 말은 가정법도 아니고 그냥 그렇게 하면 어쩔 것이다라는 말이니까 will을 쓰는 게 맞는 것 같다.
어느 글에 선과 봤던 기억에 이상하면서도 써봤더니 그렇게 쓰면 역시 안되는구나. my friend and I. I가 맨 마지막에 온다는 걸 기억하자.
오홋. 요런 걸 that으로 안 쓰고 this statement라고 써준다고? 오케이 접수.
But when we turned 40, our thoughts have(X) changed and realized that there's(there are) more things we could still do. We are(X) deserve to live even after (we turn) 40 years old. Now I feel that every year has (a) special meaning to live. Each age has the(X) attractive things (about it) according to be(OR: depending on the person) getting older. I expect what will happen in those(their) future age.
변했다. 과거형을 쓰는구나. 아무데서나 완료형 아니다.
복수니까 are
deserve 자체가 동사인데 are 가 들어갈 필요 없지.
마흔 살 되다를 turn 40 years old로... 오케이.
관사 붙일 것. a special meaning to live.
관사가 아무 데나 붙는 것 아님. attractive things about it
depending on the person으로 써라... 음.
그렇지. 그들의 미래 나이니까 their 가 되어야지.
How wonderful it is to get older. I don't care how old I am because I will live while(by) just thinking only now, the present time. I don't care (about) my future or my past, I just care (about) now, this moment. It will help me to(X) get older without any scaring(getting scared). How wonderful it is to imagine my seventies(70s) and eighties(80s) and even more. How wonderful the(X) life is whatever the(my) age is.
.. 하면서 라는 뜻으로 while을 썼는데 by를 쓰는 거구나.
care 다음에 about를 꼭 넣어줘야 하는구나.
care about
help me 동사 원형이다. to 필요 없다.
그 어떤 두려움 없이로 any scaring를 썼는데 getting scared를 써야 하는구나.
70대 80대를 이렇게 간단히 쓰면 되는구나. 70s 80s
관사 아무 데나 붙이지 말 것.
이런 땐 the 가 아니라 my가 들어감을 자꾸 익히자.
Tip:
Other nouns in the subject + “I”
When “I” is included in the subject and there are other nouns, “I” should be on the last part:
My brother and I are hungry.
My wife and I went shopping.
아하. I는 항상 맨 마지막에 쓸 것.
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