How many hours do you sleep?

Jun 4. 2022

Today’s Topic

How many hours do you sleep? How much sleep do we really need to work productively? State your opinion.

<내가 쓴 글>

I sleep 5 or 6 hours a day. I think 5 hours are enough to work productively as long as it is a deep sleep. It's more important to sleep how deeply than how many hours. Therefore I stay out of the bed until I want to sleep so much. If not, I have to try many ways to catch a nap. When I was very tired, it was so easy to get sleep deeply. So I always insist that you should be doing something outside your bed until you fall asleep. Sometimes my husband and I stay all night to watch very interesting TV drama. My husband doesn't have to wake up early in the morning because he has retired from the company a few years ago. So it's no problem to stay all night. The problem is that our bodies don't listen. When we were teenagers, we used to stay up all night. But now we can't do because of getting old. We can't do anything the next day after waking up. Therefore we try to get sleep for at least 5 hours or more than that. A deep sleep is very important for us.

<첨삭되어 온 글>

I sleep 5 or 6 (for five or six) hours a day. I think 5 (five) hours are (is) enough to work productively as long as it is a deep sleep. It's more important to (How deep we) sleep how deeply (is more important) than how many hours. (hours we sleep.)

Therefore(,) I stay out of the bed until I want to sleep so much. (as much as possible.) If not, I have to try many ways to catch (take) a nap. When I was (am) very tired, it was (is) so easy to get(X) sleep deeply. So I always insist that you should be doing something outside (away from) your bed until you fall asleep.

Sometimes my husband and I stay all night to watch (a) very interesting TV drama. My husband doesn't have to wake up early in the morning because he has(X) retired from the (his previous) company a few years ago. So it's no problem to stay (staying up) all night. (night is not a problem.) The problem is that our bodies don't listen. (OR: have limitations.)

When we were teenagers, we used to stay up all night. But now we can't do (that) because of (we are) getting old. We can't do anything the next day after (when) waking up. (up after a night of sleeping late.) Therefore(,) we try to get(X) sleep for at least 5 (five) hours or more than that. A deep sleep is very important for us.

<내가 기억해야 할 것들>

1. 앗. 이거 전에 공부한 건데 또 까맣게 잊고 숫자로 썼다. 1에서 9까지는 알파벳으로 써야 한다

I sleep for five or six hours a day.

2. 아니, 분명히 복수인데 왜 is라고 고쳐줄까? 그런데 뒤에 딸려온 멘트에서 그 의문이 풀린다.

거리, 기간, 금액 등을 단위로 간주할 때는 단수 동사를 사용한다. Five hours is enough to work productively as long as it is a deep sleep.

3. 캬~ 이렇게 간단히 표현되는 걸 난 it를 써서 구구절절이 복잡하게 표현했다. 좋은 표현을 외우자. How deep we sleep is more important than how many hours we sleep.

4. 졸릴 때까지 최대한 늦게 있는 거니까 이럴 땐 as much as possible가 맞다. I stay out of the bed until I want to sleep as much as possible.

5. 드라마 앞에는 관사 붙여주기. I stay all night to watch a very interesting TV drama.

6. 과거 확실히 일어난 일에는 과거 동사!... he retired from his previous company a few years ago.

7. 굳이 it을 쓰지 말고 직접! Staying up all night is not a problem.

8. 몸이 말을 듣지 않는다고 하하 우리말 식으로 표현했더니 바꾸길 원한다. 암. 하하 The problem is that our bodies have limitations.

9. 함부로 생략 말자! We can't do that because we are getting old.

10. 다음날 깨고 나면으로 간략히 썼더니 그게 아니고 구구절절이 설명해야 하나 보다. We can't do anything the next day when waking up after a nigh of sleeping late.

11. Therefore 다음에 콤마! Therefore, we try to sleep...

12. 함부로 get 붙이지 않기. We try to sleep for at least five hours...

13. 다시 한번 기억하자. 9까지는 숫자를 알파벳으로 써야 한다는 것.... at least five hours...

<첨삭받은 대로 고쳐 쓴 글>

I sleep for five or six hours a day. I think five hours is enough to work productively as long as it is a deep sleep. How deep we sleep is more important than how many hours we sleep.

Therefore, I stay out of the bed until I want to sleep as much as possible. If not, I have to try many ways to take a nap. When I am very tired, it is so easy to sleep deeply. So I always insist that you should be doing something away from your bed until you fall asleep.

Sometimes my husband and I stay all night to watch a very interesting TV drama. My husband doesn't have to wake up early in the morning because he retired from his previous company a few years ago. So staying up all night is not a problem. The problem is that our bodies have limitations.

When we were teenagers, we used to stay up all night. But now we can't do that because we are getting old. We can't do anything the next day when waking up after a night of sleeping late. Therefore, we try to sleep for at least five hours or more than that. A deep sleep is very important for us.

<그리고 딸려온 특별 멘트>

Thank you for completing the writing activity. It is greatly appreciated. It is nice that you made an interesting piece of writing. We can see that you try to practice your English as much as you can. Good job!

NOTES:

1. General Number Rule: Spell out whole numbers (as well as ordinal numbers) 0-9 and use figures for numbers 10 and above (examples: zero, one man, five years, 10 boxes, 96 people, 104 books, ninth floor, 15th floor).

숫자 9까지는 반드시 스펠링 다 써줄 것. 10 이상은 숫자를 써도 된다. 오케이.

2. Subject-Verb Agreement

Distances, Periods of Time, and Units of Measurement
Use a singular verb with distances, periods of time, sums of money, etc., when considered as a unit.