How much do cell phones

typically cost nowadays?

Today’s Topic

How much do cell phones typically cost nowadays?

Do you think they are too expensive?

1. 내가 쓴 글.

Nowadays cell phones cost about more than 1 million won. I think they are too expensive. However I got as soon as new cell phones are published in the world. The reason why I could get a new cell phone as soon as it comes out is that my son, who knows so well how much I like it, gave me for the present. I like buying new versions of cultural machines such as cell phone, note book, etc. So I'm expecting whenever new one comes out. My son said it's birthday present even though it's not my birthday. Let's see if it's January when the new edition comes out and my birthday is April. At that time he gave me it saying birthday present even though it's very earlier than my real birthday. In this year Samsung galaxy new edition came out but my son didn't buy it to me saying at least 2 years I have to use it. So I'm waiting for the new cell phone which will come out next year. It's very expensive but I think it has such worth.

2. 첨삭되어 온 글.

Nowadays(,) cell phones cost about more than 1 million won. (won in Korea.) I think they are too expensive. However(,) I got as soon as new (get the newest) cell phones are published in the world. (as soon as they are available on the market.) The reason why I could (can) get a new cell phone (OR: one) as soon as it comes out is that my son, who knows so well how much I like it, gave (gives it to) me for the (as a) present.

I like buying (the) new versions of cultural machines (gadgets,) such as cell phone, note book, (phones, notebooks,) etc. So I'm expecting (excited) whenever (a) new one comes out. My (In the past, my) son (always) said it's (that a gadget was a) birthday present even though it's (it was) not my birthday. Let's see if it's (what will happen in) January when the (a) new edition (model) comes out and (out. By the way,) my birthday (birth month) is April.

At that time (In the past, every January to be specific,) he gave me it (the newest gadget) saying (it was a) birthday present even though it's very earlier than(X) my real birthday. (birthday was still far away.) In this (This) year (year, a new) Samsung galaxy new edition (Galaxy unit) came out(,) but my son didn't buy it to (for) me saying at least 2 years (that) I have (had) to use it. (my current phone for at least two years.) So I'm waiting for the new cell phone which (that) will come out next year. It's very expensive(,) but I think it has such worth. (is worth it.)

3. 내가 기억해야 될 것들.

Nowadays(,) cell phones cost about more than 1 million won. (won in Korea.) I think they are too expensive. However(,) I got as soon as new (get the newest) cell phones are published in the world. (as soon as they are available on the market.) The reason why I could (can) get a new cell phone (OR: one) as soon as it comes out is that my son, who knows so well how much I like it, gave (gives it to) me for the (as a) present.

1. Nowadays뒤에 콤마 붙일 것.

2. 그냥 won이라 하지 말고 won in Korea라고 해주자.

3. However뒤에 콤마!

4. 요런 세련된 표현이! However, I get the newest cell phones as soon as they are available on the market. 하하 나온다는 걸 책이라야 publish 가 되는 거겠지 핸드폰 같은 게 나오는 건 그렇지 상가에서 살 수 있게 되는 거지. 즉 as soon as they are available on the market. 아하 기억해 두자. 그리고 최신폰이라는 말은 the newest cell phones라고 하면 되는구나. 아하!

5. 함부로 과거형 쓰지 말자. The reason why I can get a new one...

6. 한 번 쓴 단어는 one으로 받자. The reason why I can get a new one...

7. 현재형! gives it to me

8. 선물로!라고 쓸 때는 for the present 가 아니라 as a present! 외우자. as a present!

I like buying (the) new versions of cultural machines (gadgets,) such as cell phone, note book, (phones, notebooks,) etc. So I'm expecting (excited) whenever (a) new one comes out. My (In the past, my) son (always) said it's (that a gadget was a) birthday present even though it's (it was) not my birthday. Let's see if it's (what will happen in) January when the (a) new edition (model) comes out and (out. By the way,) my birthday (birth month) is April.

9. 정관사! the new versions

10. 하하 문화기계라고 cultural machines라고 했더니 gadgets라고 바꿔왔다. 뒤적뒤적 gadget는 작고 유용한 도구를 말한다. 옛날에 가제트 형사라고 있었는데 아하 작고 유용한 형사. 푸하하하 어쨌든 외우자. the new versions of gadgets.

11. 복수! phones, notebooks, etc.

12. 내가 느낄 땐 형용사에 ~ed를 써줘야지. 그 느낌을 일으키는 사람이나 사물을 묘사할 때 형용사와 ~ing를 쓰는 거야. 그러니까 여기선 excited가 되어야지. I'm excited whenever a new one comes out.

13. 과거에는, 이라고 써줘야겠구나. In the past, my son...

14. always 써주고

15. said that a gadget was a birthday present... 그래. said that... 이런 식으로 문장을 엮어가자.

16. 과거형을 축약할 순 없지. it was...

17. 아하 여기 if 대신 what will happen... 을 써주라. 아하.

18. 월 앞엔 in. in January

19. a new model... 아하 a를 쓰고 에디션이 아니라 모델을 쓰는구나. 아하.

20. 오호 By the way... 그런데 로 새 문장으로 시작하라. 오케이.

21. 그렇지 그렇지 생일이 아니라 생일 달인 거지. 그러니까 birthday 가 아니라 birth month... 아주 작은 것까지도 세밀히 신경 써야 하는구나.

gadget 작고 유용한 도구

At that time (In the past, every January to be specific,) he gave me it (the newest gadget) saying (it was a) birthday present even though it's very earlier than(X) my real birthday. (birthday was still far away.) In this (This) year (year, a new) Samsung galaxy new edition (Galaxy unit) came out(,) but my son didn't buy it to (for) me saying at least 2 years (that) I have (had) to use it. (my current phone for at least two years.) So I'm waiting for the new cell phone which (that) will come out next year. It's very expensive(,) but I think it has such worth. (is worth it.)

22. 막연히 그때라고 쓰지 말고 아하. In the past, every January to be specific, 좋았쓰. 하하

23. he gave me the newest gadget saying it was a birthday present... 그래 아주 자상히 설명해 주기. 함부로 생략 않기.

24. even though my real birthday was still far away. 아하 요렇게 세련된 표현이. 내 생일보다 한참 앞인데... 해서 very earlier than... 이런 식으로 썼는데 요게 아니라 my real birthday was still far away... 아하 너무 좋다. 그치 내 생일은 아직 멀었는데. 요렇게. my real birthday was still far away... 외우자 still far away...

25. 그냥 this year라고 하면 되는구나. 굳이 in this year이라고 쓸 필요가 없어.

26. a new Samsung Galaxy unit

27. but앞에 콤마!

28. buy it to me 가 아니라 for me 구나. 무조건 외우자. buy it for me!

29. saying that I had to use my current phone for at least two years. 힘들겠지만 요런 식의 표현을 잘 익히도록 하자. 무어라 말할 때 saying을 쓰고 다음에 that으로 연결해 그 이후 문장을 써주는 형태. 꼭 기억하자.

30. So I'm waiting for the new cell phone 다음에 which가 아니라 that임을 기억하자.

31. but 앞에 콤마!

32. 하하 가치 있다는 has such worth 가 아니고 it is worth it. 기억하자!

캬~ 기가 막히다. 어떻게 200자 영작에 무려 32개나 틀리냐. 그러나 그렇다고 기죽지 말자. 다음에 잘하면 되지! 하하 파이팅!

4. 그리고 딸려온 멘트.

Thank you for completing the writing activity. You are doing a great job. It is great that you take risks in writing and expressing various ideas, especially complex ones. Continue practicing your English skills. Enjoy the rest of your day! :)

넵! 열심히 하게씀돠! 하하

NOTE/S:

1. -ed OR -ing

a. The adjective with ~ed tells us about how a person feels about something.

Examples:

Mr. Harrison’s classes are very interesting, and the students are never bored in his classes.

My children are very excited because we will go skiing next weekend for the first time.

아하. 형용사와 ~ed는 어떤 것에 대해 어떻게 느끼는가!

b. The adjective with ~ing describes the person or thing that has caused that feeling:

Examples:

Mr. Smith’s classes are very boring and the students are bored when they are in his class.

They think that skiing must be a very exciting activity.

형용사와 ~ing는 그 느낌을 불러일으킨 사람이나 물건을 묘사할 때!

*Remember that people can be boring only if they cause other people to feel bored:

아하. 다른 사람을 지루하게 만들 때만 사람이 지루해질 수 있는 거구나. 즉 그때만 boring을 쓸 수 있는 거야.

She talks about her neighbors all day. She’s so boring.

*Remember the ~ing form of the adjective (exciting, boring, etc.) has nothing to do with the present continuous verb form.

그러니까 형용사와 함께 쓰인 ~ing는 진행형 동사와는 전혀 상관이 없는 거다.

2. General Number Rule: Spell out whole numbers (as well as ordinal numbers) 0-9 and use figures for numbers 10 and above (examples: zero, one man, five years, 10 boxes, 96 people, 104 books, ninth floor, 15th floor).

이건 여러 번 한 건데. 꼭 기억하자. 0에서 9까지는 숫자 이름 전체를 써줘야 한다. 10 이상은 그냥 숫자를 써주면 된다. zero, one man, five years, 10 boxes, 96 people, 104 books, ninth floor, 15th floor

5. 첨삭받은 대로 고쳐 쓴 글.

Nowadays, cell phones cost about more than 1 million won in Korea. I think they are too expensive. However, I get the newest cell phones as soon as they are available on the market. The reason why I can get a new one as soon as it comes out is that my son, who knows so well how much I like it, gives it to me as a present.

I like buying the new versions of gadgets, such as cell phones, notebooks, etc. So I'm excited whenever a new one comes out. In the past, my son always said that a gadget was a birthday present even though it was not my birthday. Let's see what will happen in January when a new model comes out. By the way, my birth month is April.

In the past, every January to be specific, he gave me the newest gadget saying it was a birthday present even though my real birthday was still far away. This year, a new Samsung Galaxy unit came out, but my son didn't buy it for me saying that I had to use my current phone for at least two years. So I'm waiting for the new cell phone that will come out next year. It's very expensive, but I think it is worth it.

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