Do you feel Korean movies can

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Do you feel Korean movies can give the world a better understanding of Korean culture, or not?

1. 내가 쓴 글.

Yes, I feel Korean movies can give the world a better understanding of Korean culture. Let me take an example with a movie that the title is 'Radio Star'. It shows our culture such as persistence, perseverance, effort, friendship and affection. The story of that movie is as follows. There was a great Rock Singer of yesteryear whose popularity had fallen infinitely now. He was so disappointed by himself that he let him do nothing but drink only all day. The man who was his manager at the height of his career is now old and lethargic. Let's call the singer 'A' and the manager 'B". The story of this movie is that the efforts of 'B' until he made 'A' finally be a top star again. There were so many difficulties in singing again until to be a great star. After being a star again, there were so many suggestions to change the manager from B to other a young and very capable man. 'A' insists 'B' as his manager, even though he can hire an another better person. It shows very well our culture such as persistence, perseverance, effort, friendship and affection.

2. 첨삭되어 온 글.

Yes, I feel like Korean movies can give the world a better understanding of Korean culture. Let me take an example with a movie that the title is 'Radio Star'. ("Radio Star.") It shows our culture such as persistence, perseverance, effort, friendship (friendship,) and affection. The story of that movie is as follows. There was a great Rock Singer of yesteryear whose popularity had fallen infinitely now. He was so disappointed by himself that he let him do nothing but drink only all day. The man who was his manager at the height of his career is now old and lethargic.

Let's call the singer 'A' and the manager 'B". (Let's say that there's singer A and manager B.)

The story of this movie is that the efforts of 'B' until he made 'A' finally be a top star again. (the efforts of B made A a top star again.) There were so many difficulties in singing again until (x) to be a great star. After being a star again, there were so many suggestions to change the manager from B to other a young and very capable man. 'A' insists 'B' as his manager, even though he can hire an another better person. It shows very well our culture such as persistence, perseverance, effort, friendship (friendship,) and affection.

3. 내가 기억해야 할 것들.

Yes, I feel like Korean movies can give the world a better understanding of Korean culture. Let me take an example with a movie that the title is 'Radio Star'. ("Radio Star.")

3. 맞다. 영어에 작은따옴표는 없다. 그러므로 큰따옴표로 항상 적어야 한다.

Let me take an example with a movie that the title is "Radio Star."

요건 좀 이상하다. 마침표가 따옴표 다음에 와야 할 텐데.

Let me take an example with a movie that the title is "Radio Star".

요게 맞을 것 같은데.

It shows our culture such as persistence, perseverance, effort, friendship (friendship,) and affection.

4. 아하. 바로 요거구나. 세 개 이상을 나열할 땐 콤마로 계속 이어가다가 마지막 전에 콤마 하고 and를 쓰고 마지막 항목 써넣기. 오케이.

It shows our culture such as persistence, perseverance, effort, friendship, and affection.

Let's call the singer 'A' and the manager 'B". (Let's say that there's singer A and manager B.)

5. 아하 이런 건 call 이 아니라 say라고 하는구나. 그리고 that을 써주고 문장을 만들어주자. Let's say that there's singer A and manager B.

The story of this movie is that the efforts of 'B' until he made 'A' finally be a top star again. (the efforts of B made A a top star again.)

6. 아, 요렇게 세련되게 표현이 가능하구나. the efforts of B made A a top star again.

There were so many difficulties in singing again until (x) to be a great star.

7. 여기 until은 필요하지 않구나.

There were so many difficulties in singing again to be a great star.

It shows very well our culture such as persistence, perseverance, effort, friendship (friendship,) and affection.

8. 다시 한번! 무언 가 세 개 이상 연결할 땐 마지막 항목 이전에 콤마를 하고 and를 붙인 후 마지막 항목을 쓴다.

It shows very well our culture such as persistence, perseverance, effort, friendship, and affection.

4. 그리고 딸려온 멘트.

Hello there~! Thank you for submitting this essay. Now, before anything else, I'd like to give you this tip:

When you're listing down some things in a paragraph, don't forget to include a comma before the word "and" + your last thing on the list.

1. 문장 중 무언가 열거할 때는 마지막 거 앞에 and를 붙이고 그 앞에 반드시 콤마를 붙인다. 아하.

Use commas to separate words and word groups in a simple series of three or more items.

2. 세 개 이상의 단어 그룹이나 단어를 분리할 때는 콤마를 쓴다.

Examples:

My estate goes to my husband, son, daughter-in-law, and nephew.

I need to buy apples, bananas, strawberries, and oranges.

I'm going to visit Paris, Rome, Amsterdam, and Berlin.

아하. 요렇게 세 개 이상이 되면 열거 후 맨 마지막에 and를 쓰고 그 바로 앞에 콤마 찍어주기.

Nonetheless, I think you still did a pretty good job. Just don't forget to review my corrections and suggestions to help improve your English writing skills even more. If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to ask! Have a nice day.

넵! 감사합니다~

5. 첨삭받은 대로 고쳐 쓴 글.

Yes, I feel like Korean movies can give the world a better understanding of Korean culture. Let me take an example with a movie that the title is "Radio Star." It shows our culture such as persistence, perseverance, effort, friendship, and affection. The story of that movie is as follows. There was a great Rock Singer of yesteryear whose popularity had fallen infinitely now. He was so disappointed by himself that he let him do nothing but drink only all day. The man who was his manager at the height of his career is now old and lethargic.

Let's say that there's singer A and manager B.

The story of this movie is that the efforts of B made A a top star again. There were so many difficulties in singing again to be a great star. After being a star again, there were so many suggestions to change the manager from B to other a young and very capable man. 'A' insists 'B' as his manager, even though he can hire an another better person. It shows very well our culture such as persistence, perseverance, effort, friendship, and affection.

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